A Griever's Prayer
Emotion Poem24 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Tom
This is a nicely worded poem about how grief takes over days and nights.
You need strength to get through it to get somewhat back to normal.
You are a good photographer too.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Good luck in the contest.
Have a good weekend.
Joan
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Hi Tom
This is a nicely worded poem about how grief takes over days and nights.
You need strength to get through it to get somewhat back to normal.
You are a good photographer too.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Good luck in the contest.
Have a good weekend.
Joan
Comment Written 10-Jan-2025
Comment from Nicki.B
I am so sorry for your loss Grandparents are just so special I miss mine so much always.
The photography is excellent and goes beautifully with the poem. You have captured the emotion of grief very well throughout all the phases to go through and the pain it causes, so well done. I wish you and your family my deepest condolences, look after yourselves.
Best Wishes
Nicki
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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I am so sorry for your loss Grandparents are just so special I miss mine so much always.
The photography is excellent and goes beautifully with the poem. You have captured the emotion of grief very well throughout all the phases to go through and the pain it causes, so well done. I wish you and your family my deepest condolences, look after yourselves.
Best Wishes
Nicki
Comment Written 10-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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Thank you. Even though tears were shed, the memories overcame the grim we felt as smiles grew wide recalling the man his children called fondly, dad.
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Thank you. Even though tears were shed, the memories overcame the grim we felt as smiles grew wide recalling the man his children called fondly, dad.
Comment from kiwisteveh
I like the rhyming but free-form verse you have presented here. It captures not only the grief that is central to the piece but also the sense of a fractured mind attempting to deal with the shock of loss.
Just a suggestion that you apply consistency in those final lines by using either thee/thy or you/your
Steve
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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I like the rhyming but free-form verse you have presented here. It captures not only the grief that is central to the piece but also the sense of a fractured mind attempting to deal with the shock of loss.
Just a suggestion that you apply consistency in those final lines by using either thee/thy or you/your
Steve
Comment Written 10-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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I'll take a peek to see how I went astray, though it's been accepted as is without nary a peep. Thank you.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Very nicely written poem of grief.
Speaking of ids and egos, mine, I'm afraid, needs a good slappin' on a fairly regular basis.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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Very nicely written poem of grief.
Speaking of ids and egos, mine, I'm afraid, needs a good slappin' on a fairly regular basis.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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Well, I am willing but untrained on slappin. Have you someone nearer to thee that could lend a hand. I think I'll try spending time writing a roulette or ode. Be well
Comment from June Sargent
You've beautifully captured the grief that grips our hearts after the loss of a loved one. And it eventually will listen its grip, but only after a few sleepless nights. I am sorry for your loss and know this poem is one we all can relate to.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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You've beautifully captured the grief that grips our hearts after the loss of a loved one. And it eventually will listen its grip, but only after a few sleepless nights. I am sorry for your loss and know this poem is one we all can relate to.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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Thank you. The words became deeper this morning as I read it graveside. Time will heal our wounds.
Comment from Gunner Lil
Love the picture used for this poem. There is so much one can see in her eyes and the expression on her face.
The poem is an easy read with an excellent flow and pace.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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Love the picture used for this poem. There is so much one can see in her eyes and the expression on her face.
The poem is an easy read with an excellent flow and pace.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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And I appreciate the kind words you share. Glad you understood the meaning. Appreciatively yours.
Comment from papa55mike
Grief seems to be galloping through our family. We lost our sweet granddaughter about 15 months ago, and it is a bitter pill to swallow. This is a wonderfully written poem. Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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Grief seems to be galloping through our family. We lost our sweet granddaughter about 15 months ago, and it is a bitter pill to swallow. This is a wonderfully written poem. Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 10-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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I only now recall it being in a contest. I read it graveside this morning and nearly choked on the emotions that tore at my heartstrings.
Thank you.
Comment from Sally Law
This is a powerful entry for the emotions contest, Tom. A personal one for you too. I'm sorry for your friend's loss. A hard road I've walked many times, but never alone. Sending along my very best and my good wishes for the contest.
Sal
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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This is a powerful entry for the emotions contest, Tom. A personal one for you too. I'm sorry for your friend's loss. A hard road I've walked many times, but never alone. Sending along my very best and my good wishes for the contest.
Sal
Comment Written 10-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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Dad was a "special" man. Needed no one to do anything, save to bury him, and yet he was compassionate for the unfortunate, supporting many who needed it.
Comment from Mary Vigasin
Powerful and raw. I understand how deep the hole can be. This brought tears as I am having a hard time with my brother's sudden death three months ago. He was the rock I could stand on, the shoulder I could cry on when the going got too tough.
To me your words brought understanding to my grief.
Mary
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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Powerful and raw. I understand how deep the hole can be. This brought tears as I am having a hard time with my brother's sudden death three months ago. He was the rock I could stand on, the shoulder I could cry on when the going got too tough.
To me your words brought understanding to my grief.
Mary
Comment Written 10-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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I never would have thought this would bring solace to anyone but the immediate family, but the response on FanStory by fellow writers tell me it has. I'm glad. Thank you.
Comment from TPAC
A deep conveyance, thinking myself rather than bothering the higher to assist: assist me in their cause. Help the efforts of Jesus, given by the Holy Text. Do the impossible in hell: believe in God.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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A deep conveyance, thinking myself rather than bothering the higher to assist: assist me in their cause. Help the efforts of Jesus, given by the Holy Text. Do the impossible in hell: believe in God.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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I have and will believe til proven incorrect.
