The Richest Poor Kid on my Block
A poor boy with three jobs at 10.17 total reviews
Comment from Elias Noor
This narrative is heartfelt and deeply evocative, offering a vivid glimpse into a hardworking, resilient childhood during a transformative time in American history. The tone is warm and reflective, capturing the innocence, ambition, and bittersweet experiences of growing up in the late 1960s.
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This narrative is heartfelt and deeply evocative, offering a vivid glimpse into a hardworking, resilient childhood during a transformative time in American history. The tone is warm and reflective, capturing the innocence, ambition, and bittersweet experiences of growing up in the late 1960s.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2025
Comment from Wendy G
You showed lots of initiative as a boy of ten, and you worked hard to provide yourself with treats. It seems that you enjoyed the hard work and this simple life was a carefree one. Very well written.
Wendy
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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You showed lots of initiative as a boy of ten, and you worked hard to provide yourself with treats. It seems that you enjoyed the hard work and this simple life was a carefree one. Very well written.
Wendy
Comment Written 10-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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Well thank you so much Wendy. I really appreciate that! Yes. I was always a very motivated individual. I joined two branches of the military. Started as a sergeant in the U.S. Army and retired as a Coast Guard Officer after a lot of 19-hour days! I have always worked very hard.
Comment from zanya
What an enjoyable read and told with such rich storytelling skills -the reader is not likely to get bored or want to skip over paragraphs here -and the comparison of a child's life today is interesting
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What an enjoyable read and told with such rich storytelling skills -the reader is not likely to get bored or want to skip over paragraphs here -and the comparison of a child's life today is interesting
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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Thank you Zanya! Yes, the comparison of a child's life today. I was always so watchful over my 10-year-old son because I felt I had to be. And he never could have done what I did as a 10-year-old in the world we live in today. So sad...
Comment from Brenda Strauser
I enjoyed reading your poem. Good imagination. The poem describes the three jobs very well. I like the words you used for the title. Things are sure different now. Well written.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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I enjoyed reading your poem. Good imagination. The poem describes the three jobs very well. I like the words you used for the title. Things are sure different now. Well written.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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Well, thank you so much Brenda for your kind review. I truly appreciate that! And yes. Things are so much different now...
Comment from Gunner Lil
Sentence structure needs revision. Sensory description isn't bad but could use more detail.
Why did the doctors give you only two weeks to live?
Why didn't you know you were from a poor family?
Was anyone else hurt in the traumatic accident you were in? How did it happen?
How long did you deliver the newspapers? Another year or more.
Who taught who to cheat the coke machine? Do you still cheat?
This was a good outline but not worthy of 6 stars.
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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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Sentence structure needs revision. Sensory description isn't bad but could use more detail.
Why did the doctors give you only two weeks to live?
Why didn't you know you were from a poor family?
Was anyone else hurt in the traumatic accident you were in? How did it happen?
How long did you deliver the newspapers? Another year or more.
Who taught who to cheat the coke machine? Do you still cheat?
This was a good outline but not worthy of 6 stars.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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I know you are jealous, but keep trying...
Comment from marilyn quillen
great story, i was born the year before you, so everything is just as I remember too, great times made for a great story and you wrote it excellently, I don't see anything that needs improved, fantastic job. oops now that makes 4 jobs!
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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great story, i was born the year before you, so everything is just as I remember too, great times made for a great story and you wrote it excellently, I don't see anything that needs improved, fantastic job. oops now that makes 4 jobs!
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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Well, thank you so much Marilyn for your kind review. I truly appreciate that!
Comment from Michele Harber
I reiterate everything I said in the last review. You are a very talented writer! It truly sounds as though you had a wonderful life, but the nicest part is that you recognized it. George Bailey needed an angel to convince him of what a wonderful life he had, but all you needed was a rickety bicycle and a pocket full of money.
I love the innocence and peace of the Norman Rockwell picture you paint of your childhood. Sadly, you're correct that the things that made that time so special to you could not take place today. I'm happy for you that you have such wonderful memories to look back on, and for FanStory that we get to relive them with you through your excellent writing.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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I reiterate everything I said in the last review. You are a very talented writer! It truly sounds as though you had a wonderful life, but the nicest part is that you recognized it. George Bailey needed an angel to convince him of what a wonderful life he had, but all you needed was a rickety bicycle and a pocket full of money.
I love the innocence and peace of the Norman Rockwell picture you paint of your childhood. Sadly, you're correct that the things that made that time so special to you could not take place today. I'm happy for you that you have such wonderful memories to look back on, and for FanStory that we get to relive them with you through your excellent writing.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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Thank you so much Michele for your kind review! I really appreciate that! Yes, if I could I would use my magic wand and take us all back to the summer of 1969!!!
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Your doing just fine (writing). Good work.
You're right, kids couldn't get jobs like that these days. Adults have paper routes delivering from their cars - til papers like the AR Democrat gave everyone a tablet and they now get them electronically.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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Your doing just fine (writing). Good work.
You're right, kids couldn't get jobs like that these days. Adults have paper routes delivering from their cars - til papers like the AR Democrat gave everyone a tablet and they now get them electronically.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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LOL! Yes Wayne. You are so right. Everything has gone electronically today. You can't even talk with a real person on the phone most of the time. I truly appreciate your review! Thank you!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I think I might have heard part of this story before, Harry, but it's certainly a great one. You were obviously a very enterprising young lad and I think it's truly very admirable that you managed to hold down three jobs a day and cycle all over Evansville. You experienced freedom, excitement and the sheer buzz of earning cash which made you feel so rich. That was a shocking thing to learn about your cousin, especially when he was obviously a bit of a hero-figure to you. But you've conveyed here a childhood that taught you so much. After a difficult start, you were determined to make your life as full as possible and you succeeded. Well done, Harry. Debbie
At noon I rode my (bike)...
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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I think I might have heard part of this story before, Harry, but it's certainly a great one. You were obviously a very enterprising young lad and I think it's truly very admirable that you managed to hold down three jobs a day and cycle all over Evansville. You experienced freedom, excitement and the sheer buzz of earning cash which made you feel so rich. That was a shocking thing to learn about your cousin, especially when he was obviously a bit of a hero-figure to you. But you've conveyed here a childhood that taught you so much. After a difficult start, you were determined to make your life as full as possible and you succeeded. Well done, Harry. Debbie
At noon I rode my (bike)...
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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Thank you so much Debbie for your kind review. I truly appreciate that! And thanks for catching my oops. Yes it was a different time back then. And I joined two military branches and retired after more than 27 years of service to our country. I tried to honor my cousin the best that I could. It is tragic to lose your life at 18...
Comment from Thesis
Harry, this story brought me back to my childhood. I too had a paper route and always made money somehow. My parents were poor too, so I can relate to this story. thanks for the flashback to a world that was kinder, had morals, and made us all feel a lot safer.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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Harry, this story brought me back to my childhood. I too had a paper route and always made money somehow. My parents were poor too, so I can relate to this story. thanks for the flashback to a world that was kinder, had morals, and made us all feel a lot safer.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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You are so right Thesis. If I could use my magic wand. I would take us all back to the summer of 1969...
