Comment from Y. M. Roger

Excellent

Aaaah, the winter cardinal.... my favorite feathered friend!! ;) Love to watch them at the feeders on the back porch! ;) A wonderful addition to the RENGA, my lady!! ;) Yvette

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2025

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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025

I just wrote a new one following yours.

Thanks a lot for the great review.

Comment from mermaids

Excellent

It is always a delight to see a cardinal and your words capture their beauty."Pure delight" is a perfect use of words to capture the feelings they bring when one observes them. Excellent poetic form and use of words.

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2025

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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025

Thanks a lot for the great review.

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Linked Renga Poems:

Chapter 77
raging west wind blows
embers through forest and towns
wise owls fly northbound
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Chapter 78
a flash of red in white snow
a beam of warmth, pure delight
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Haiku is an unrhymed poem but a 5/7/5 poem is not. Renga is considered a form of tanka 5/7/5 and 7/7. I would keep it as is.

I am happy you contributed to the Renga Book. It's an excellent chapter. The poem has the right composition but the link between 5/7/5 and 7/7 could be improved. Beautiful presentation and imagery. Good syllables and connection between lines. Thank you for adding the author notes :)

Gypsy

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2025

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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025

Thanks a lot for the great review. It's so nice to have you back. I hope the fire situation is getting better. My son's apartment is fine so far but he is still in RPV at girlfriend's parents' house.

I think the new 7/7 has a better linkage.

Thanks a lot for the great review.

reply by Gypsy Blue Rose on 10-Jan-2025

Looks great!

Comment from Begin Again

Excellent

I am blessed to have these lovely birds living in my back yard. Every time I see one, I think I am being visited and blessed by one of my family members... They are so beautiful...and your poem is perfect.
Smiles, Carol

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2025

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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025

Thanks a lot for the great review. Yes. We have them, too.

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

I'm not sure weather I should do "white snow" or "snow white (whether, not weather)

I'm not a poet so I won't be of any help. The artwork you used it the same artwork I have as my screen saver on my computer. I enjoyed reading this poem.

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2025

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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025

Thanks a lot for the great review. Wow. I should do the same for my computer.

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

Those flashes of red are delightful and always bring hope and I have never seen a cardinal in real life so I am envious. A fine presentation Lisa, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2025

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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025

Thanks a lot for the great review. There are many Cardinals in the US in my backyard. Mostly in the summer.

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This two-line poem, A Delightful Red Cardinal, has the proper formatting and finds itself significantly displayed within the cold and washed out setting in winter.

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2025

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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025

Thanks a lot for the great review.

Comment from Debbie D'Arcy

Excellent

I thought it was going to be a butterfly but I like this little chap even better! A stunning pic with excellent imagery of "beam of warmth" which delights the senses. Your 5-7-5 Renga is fully compliant. Well done, Lisa. Warm wishes Debbie

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2025

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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025

Thanks a lot for the great review.

Comment from Sugarray77

Excellent

Good morning Lisa,
This is an excellent entry for the Renga prompt. Your artwork is stunning and sets up your theme perfectly. Great job. It's so good to read your writing again!

Melissa

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2025

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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025

Thanks a lot for the great review.

Comment from RodG

Excellent

This is a delightful winter scene that uplifts the spirits. Who does not enjoy spotting a cardinals on a snowy branch? I like the poem written as it is with the internal rhyme in line1 and the end rhyme in line 2. Rod

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2025

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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025

Thanks a lot for the great review. Yes, internal rhyme is allowed and I like it, too.