A Leaf on the Wind
Viewing comments for Chapter 72 "The Truth"Autobiography of abuse
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Comment from laurelp
Well, it was about time. You have needed to say this for so long. I am glad you had a chance to clear the air a little. I am going on vacation for about 8 days to Vancouver, Canada. I will try and read you while I am there. If not, see you when I return.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
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Well, it was about time. You have needed to say this for so long. I am glad you had a chance to clear the air a little. I am going on vacation for about 8 days to Vancouver, Canada. I will try and read you while I am there. If not, see you when I return.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
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Thank you for your kind review and high rating. There are only two chapters left. Have fun on your vacation.
Comment from penelope
Your writing is so very good, Smurphgirl. You've come full circle by being able to confront your mother with all the sordid details. Bravo to you and your writing. I have to give your mother lots of praise too because, although she abandoned your emotionally, she at least had the backbone to listen to you and to tell you to go ahead with your book. I have absolutely nothing to critique. Penelope
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
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Your writing is so very good, Smurphgirl. You've come full circle by being able to confront your mother with all the sordid details. Bravo to you and your writing. I have to give your mother lots of praise too because, although she abandoned your emotionally, she at least had the backbone to listen to you and to tell you to go ahead with your book. I have absolutely nothing to critique. Penelope
Comment Written 31-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
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Thank you for your kind review and high rating. I sincerely appreciate it.
Comment from DecrepitOldBag
This really is as beautifully written an account as could be wished for. You've managed to describe your feelings, emotions, surprise and fear all in relatively few words. One always longs for closure, but sometimes, when it comes along unexpectedly, it's as difficult to accept as any of the rest of it. You've done so very well throughout this book. It's not for me to say so, but very well done to you!
There is just one line here which doesn't quite flow/make total sense:
"....arrested for child abuse. Even after saying his death, both Teresa and Mom...."
Warmest wishes
Your friend, Kat
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
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This really is as beautifully written an account as could be wished for. You've managed to describe your feelings, emotions, surprise and fear all in relatively few words. One always longs for closure, but sometimes, when it comes along unexpectedly, it's as difficult to accept as any of the rest of it. You've done so very well throughout this book. It's not for me to say so, but very well done to you!
There is just one line here which doesn't quite flow/make total sense:
"....arrested for child abuse. Even after saying his death, both Teresa and Mom...."
Warmest wishes
Your friend, Kat
Comment Written 31-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
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Thank you for your kind review. I fixed that section so it should read better.
Comment from Firefly54
"You have a lot (of)nerve saying that to me!"
"Even after saying his death," something not quite right here.
I happened in my husbands family with people thinking, "everything that happens is part of God's plan" never considering that God might have planned them to do something about it... Another excellent chapter
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
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"You have a lot (of)nerve saying that to me!"
"Even after saying his death," something not quite right here.
I happened in my husbands family with people thinking, "everything that happens is part of God's plan" never considering that God might have planned them to do something about it... Another excellent chapter
Comment Written 31-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
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What an excellent line, "everything that happens is part of God's plan" never considering that God might have planned them to do something about it." Thank you for the high rating. Only two chapters left.
Comment from adewpearl
What a cathartic experience this must have been for you, talking non-stop for two hours, spilling all the sordid details that she had chosen to ignore - it says something for her that she still wanted you to write the book. Brooke
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
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What a cathartic experience this must have been for you, talking non-stop for two hours, spilling all the sordid details that she had chosen to ignore - it says something for her that she still wanted you to write the book. Brooke
Comment Written 31-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
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Yes, my mother had her share of demons but I admired that she accepted responsibility for her behavior. Thank you for your kind review. Only two chapters left.
Comment from K-Patrick
I don't usually read/review chapters of novels that I haven't bookcased. I am mot sure why I clicked on this, maybe the title. In a way I am glad I read it, in another way I wish I passed it by.
It is written very well and a powerful presence. The build up is good and the description and Dialogue is top notch. I always try to offer something for a story so:
I told her abut[SP] the devastation
Her honesty was [again] unxpected[SP]. - this was the second time this chapter that her honesty was unexpected (also unexpected spelled wrong).
Regarding this quote:
??Telling me I am a survivor only gets you off the hook. You have a lot nerve saying that to me!??
-- It appears that her calling you a survivor DID NOT get her off the hook, but was the catalyst that prompted the rest of the chapter. I understand that this is a bio and dialogue is mostly from memory, but is this what you meant 'gets you OFF the hook'?
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
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I don't usually read/review chapters of novels that I haven't bookcased. I am mot sure why I clicked on this, maybe the title. In a way I am glad I read it, in another way I wish I passed it by.
It is written very well and a powerful presence. The build up is good and the description and Dialogue is top notch. I always try to offer something for a story so:
I told her abut[SP] the devastation
Her honesty was [again] unxpected[SP]. - this was the second time this chapter that her honesty was unexpected (also unexpected spelled wrong).
Regarding this quote:
??Telling me I am a survivor only gets you off the hook. You have a lot nerve saying that to me!??
-- It appears that her calling you a survivor DID NOT get her off the hook, but was the catalyst that prompted the rest of the chapter. I understand that this is a bio and dialogue is mostly from memory, but is this what you meant 'gets you OFF the hook'?
Comment Written 31-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
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Yes, that is what I meant. I will go back over the chapter and see what I can do. I sincerely appreciate your detailed critique and high rating. Thank you.
Comment from P1
i havent been reading writing or reviewing much in the last few weeks, and this one came up for review so i went with it. a lot of this has gone on here in ireland where the mother says she never knew...cases are going to court every day telling of horriffic child abuse. this sounds like it could be the prologue of your book although i see from the amount of chapters you are really well into it.
the fact that it is biographical makes it even more difficult to read. hugs
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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
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i havent been reading writing or reviewing much in the last few weeks, and this one came up for review so i went with it. a lot of this has gone on here in ireland where the mother says she never knew...cases are going to court every day telling of horriffic child abuse. this sounds like it could be the prologue of your book although i see from the amount of chapters you are really well into it.
the fact that it is biographical makes it even more difficult to read. hugs
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Comment Written 31-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
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Thank you for your kind review. I sincerely appreciate your comments.
Comment from prodigal
As much as it hurts, your mother was right. You have a story that needs to be told and you are an exceptional writer. I was glad to read that she finally let you tell her everything that happened. This chapter was well written as usual. - Sam
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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
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As much as it hurts, your mother was right. You have a story that needs to be told and you are an exceptional writer. I was glad to read that she finally let you tell her everything that happened. This chapter was well written as usual. - Sam
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Comment Written 31-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
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Thank you. My mother had her demons but I truly admire that she stepped up and accepted responsibility for her actions.
