Benefits Of The Job
An unlikely encounter.23 total reviews
Comment from sunnilicious
If daydreams could come true.... this would probably be a good one. Well thought out. Sexually written. Great dialogue. Excellent work.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2012
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If daydreams could come true.... this would probably be a good one. Well thought out. Sexually written. Great dialogue. Excellent work.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2012
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Thank you. What a fun daydream. It would be nice if these dreams came true, LOL.
Comment from Stalking Wolf
The writer seems to have taken care of all the qualifications. of this contest. Length, total opposites and of course the erotic theme. Very well detailed and descriptions of events, luck with contest.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2012
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The writer seems to have taken care of all the qualifications. of this contest. Length, total opposites and of course the erotic theme. Very well detailed and descriptions of events, luck with contest.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2012
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Thank you for reading and for your comments. I appreciate them.
Comment from MumEsGirl
Great fun write. I ejoyed the subtle flirtation and underlying threats. It would appear that some jobs still come with perks.
Best of luck in the contest
hugs
kate
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2012
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Great fun write. I ejoyed the subtle flirtation and underlying threats. It would appear that some jobs still come with perks.
Best of luck in the contest
hugs
kate
Comment Written 12-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2012
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These kind of perks could have some wonderful effects on people, LOL. Thanks for your comments, Kate.
Comment from Soledadpaz
Maybe break up the first dialogue paragraph after the second sentence with some action, such as his eyes involuntarily sliding toward her image in the rear view mirror.
The use of "vaginal muscles" gives the erotic a sudden clinical twist. Perhaps, heavenly moist channel? Or something to that effect and then end the story there.
Overall the story line and structure works very well and accomplishes its mission of being erotic.
Sol
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Maybe break up the first dialogue paragraph after the second sentence with some action, such as his eyes involuntarily sliding toward her image in the rear view mirror.
The use of "vaginal muscles" gives the erotic a sudden clinical twist. Perhaps, heavenly moist channel? Or something to that effect and then end the story there.
Overall the story line and structure works very well and accomplishes its mission of being erotic.
Sol
Comment Written 12-Sep-2012
Comment from jmdg1954
Well written... Every mans dream encounter! There was enough erotica in the passage that left enough to ones imagination. Best of luck in the contest, should do well. John
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Well written... Every mans dream encounter! There was enough erotica in the passage that left enough to ones imagination. Best of luck in the contest, should do well. John
Comment Written 12-Sep-2012
Comment from Meta~Mark
wow, that is some emplyee relationship, wow wow wow, straight from a playboy forum fantasy story this packed erotica to the T, well done!
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wow, that is some emplyee relationship, wow wow wow, straight from a playboy forum fantasy story this packed erotica to the T, well done!
Comment Written 12-Sep-2012
Comment from kashmayank
nice job but the level of erotica can be increased that wiill make it more appealing all the best for future a nice job on this one
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nice job but the level of erotica can be increased that wiill make it more appealing all the best for future a nice job on this one
Comment Written 12-Sep-2012
Comment from humpwhistle
A nicely erotic piece of writing. But the mistress and the chauffeur thing isn't exactly novel. Actually it's a staple of the erotica world going back to the mistress and the stable boy days. Still, I enjoyed.
Peace, Lee
...didn't notice when (she) turned away...
Her hand started licking your shaft? That's what it says.
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A nicely erotic piece of writing. But the mistress and the chauffeur thing isn't exactly novel. Actually it's a staple of the erotica world going back to the mistress and the stable boy days. Still, I enjoyed.
Peace, Lee
...didn't notice when (she) turned away...
Her hand started licking your shaft? That's what it says.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2012
Comment from joann r romei
This is cute, and the best for me so far, It wasn't so graphic yet the scenes were well done and the message was clear, Good scene shifts and dialogue.
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This is cute, and the best for me so far, It wasn't so graphic yet the scenes were well done and the message was clear, Good scene shifts and dialogue.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2012
Comment from Cobalt Blue
Hmmmm....a very erotic fantasy! This is certainly one many of us can identify with, mixing it up with a woman of a much higher rank and class, instantly giving a boost to our sexual self esteem. Well done! This will get my vote!
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Hmmmm....a very erotic fantasy! This is certainly one many of us can identify with, mixing it up with a woman of a much higher rank and class, instantly giving a boost to our sexual self esteem. Well done! This will get my vote!
Comment Written 12-Sep-2012
