Vision and Sound: Their Stories
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Born Enemies: Destiny's Own Time"Two souls that meet as strangers on earth.
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Comment from nancy_e_davis
I haven't an inkling of an idea how this will play out Michael, and I fear a budding romance will see an early winter. Both armies will be sandwiched by the time they even see the valley. Very interesting. Will they see each other again? That is a question in my mind. Well done. Nancy
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I haven't an inkling of an idea how this will play out Michael, and I fear a budding romance will see an early winter. Both armies will be sandwiched by the time they even see the valley. Very interesting. Will they see each other again? That is a question in my mind. Well done. Nancy
Comment Written 20-Sep-2014
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
You've set this up nicely for a craaaazzzzy battle, or two, or three. I should think the slaves would fight the hardest due to sheer desperation and they'd rather die than go back.
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You've set this up nicely for a craaaazzzzy battle, or two, or three. I should think the slaves would fight the hardest due to sheer desperation and they'd rather die than go back.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2014
Comment from robina1978
I like your book. But one thing: in my opinion you cover too many scenes in one chapter. But maybe it's me as I missed some of them.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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I like your book. But one thing: in my opinion you cover too many scenes in one chapter. But maybe it's me as I missed some of them.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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It is a little complicated. But, yes it has been building up to this. There are four groups of soldiers all heading to the same spot for the big battle. There are going to be big surprises for everybody. So, I'm showing each of them as they move closer and closer to the battle. Once the battle starts the rest of the book won't be like this. It's hard for me to keep track of too! Hahaha. Thank you for the wonderful review. mikey
Comment from nordicgirl
This is just stellar. The tension is off the charts as the various forces converge. None of this is contrived. It is all believable. Wow!! Take your time. You are in charge. This is your best!
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This is just stellar. The tension is off the charts as the various forces converge. None of this is contrived. It is all believable. Wow!! Take your time. You are in charge. This is your best!
Comment Written 20-Sep-2014
Comment from Michaelk
Great chapter. A prelude to a great battle. Shades of Lord of the Rings. 'The board is set, the pieces are moving, we come to it at last, the great battle of our time.' (Gandalf)
Excellent setup. Anticipation is thick in the air. I can't believe that this epic story started out the way it did. I love it. At this rate your next 'story' will be the size of 'War and Peace'. :)
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Great chapter. A prelude to a great battle. Shades of Lord of the Rings. 'The board is set, the pieces are moving, we come to it at last, the great battle of our time.' (Gandalf)
Excellent setup. Anticipation is thick in the air. I can't believe that this epic story started out the way it did. I love it. At this rate your next 'story' will be the size of 'War and Peace'. :)
Comment Written 20-Sep-2014
Comment from Nichola
Great. I enjoyed this story. You have a rich imagination. The characters were believable and the dialogue flowed nicely. The setting is intriguing. There was something I noticed that you could correct:
they are but women and children
Nichola
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Great. I enjoyed this story. You have a rich imagination. The characters were believable and the dialogue flowed nicely. The setting is intriguing. There was something I noticed that you could correct:
they are but women and children
Nichola
Comment Written 20-Sep-2014
Comment from Jay Squires
You've got kind neighbors, Mikey. Or else they are entertained by gawking at the crazy man.
He turned and returned to the front. [The phraseology is a bit awkward.]
The chapter progresses and grows in the intensity of its action. The lovers are drawing closer. Love and honor will lock lovers' horns. (It's late, what am I even talking about?)
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You've got kind neighbors, Mikey. Or else they are entertained by gawking at the crazy man.
He turned and returned to the front. [The phraseology is a bit awkward.]
The chapter progresses and grows in the intensity of its action. The lovers are drawing closer. Love and honor will lock lovers' horns. (It's late, what am I even talking about?)
Comment Written 20-Sep-2014
Comment from drivenbackward
Very intriguing chapter, Mikey. Tons of suspense. Great stuff.
Dreams are powerful things, but realities arrive with a thick and dark oil that obscures them. -- Good!
She approached the mirage and inquired of its occupant, -- Period, not comma.
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Very intriguing chapter, Mikey. Tons of suspense. Great stuff.
Dreams are powerful things, but realities arrive with a thick and dark oil that obscures them. -- Good!
She approached the mirage and inquired of its occupant, -- Period, not comma.
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Comment Written 19-Sep-2014
Comment from Sasha
This is not at all what I anticipated and has captured my full attention. What will happen next is pounding in my heart. Great work with this one and I anxiously await the next post.
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This is not at all what I anticipated and has captured my full attention. What will happen next is pounding in my heart. Great work with this one and I anxiously await the next post.
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Comment Written 19-Sep-2014
