Vision and Sound: Their Stories
Viewing comments for Chapter 33 "Julia Reaches Through to Florentina"Two souls that meet as strangers on earth.
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Comment from drivenbackward
I don't know how you write a story based on this time period. You must have a passion for that era. Well done again. Nice dialogue. This read really fast. Only one note to consider:
Florentina looked at him very seriously and said, -- Might read better without 'very'. 'Very' is actually a weak word, Your call.
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I don't know how you write a story based on this time period. You must have a passion for that era. Well done again. Nice dialogue. This read really fast. Only one note to consider:
Florentina looked at him very seriously and said, -- Might read better without 'very'. 'Very' is actually a weak word, Your call.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2014
Comment from gypsycaravan
Love the implications that what we do not understand does not mean it is wrong. We judge things like that on a daily basis. A very intolerant world we live in and yet we are too apathetic and accepting on many things we should not tolerate. It was an interesting event with Julia and Florentina helping her to understand the wolves' meaning and appearance. Nice work, mikey
one suggestion"
sometimes when people where different people.---"where" should be "were"
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Love the implications that what we do not understand does not mean it is wrong. We judge things like that on a daily basis. A very intolerant world we live in and yet we are too apathetic and accepting on many things we should not tolerate. It was an interesting event with Julia and Florentina helping her to understand the wolves' meaning and appearance. Nice work, mikey
one suggestion"
sometimes when people where different people.---"where" should be "were"
Comment Written 21-Oct-2014
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
WOnderful scene of Julia helping Florrie deal with the wolf vision in a positive way! Very clever and effective. Julia (you) seems very bright. :)
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WOnderful scene of Julia helping Florrie deal with the wolf vision in a positive way! Very clever and effective. Julia (you) seems very bright. :)
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Comment Written 21-Oct-2014
Comment from CR Delport
Although Valerius understands, it doesn't mean the church people do. They have their mind set on demons, and nothing will change their minds. This was a very interesting chapter. Well done.
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Although Valerius understands, it doesn't mean the church people do. They have their mind set on demons, and nothing will change their minds. This was a very interesting chapter. Well done.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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I so pleased that you liked this particular chapter. I was pretty happy with it myself! Thank you for all the stars. I was in need of a smile. :)) mikey
Comment from Jay Squires
This is one of the better chapters, Mikey. I think it is the best you have written to date. Of course, don't you know I'd already squandered all my 6s, and this truly is worthy.
Looking beyond the wolves and getting the child to see her father... that was brilliant.
Great work, Mikey.
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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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This is one of the better chapters, Mikey. I think it is the best you have written to date. Of course, don't you know I'd already squandered all my 6s, and this truly is worthy.
Looking beyond the wolves and getting the child to see her father... that was brilliant.
Great work, Mikey.
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Comment Written 21-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much. I felt pretty good about this one myself. I so pleased you liked it. I even had less "that's" too correct before posting! I'll take lavish praise over a six anytime. :) mikey
