Vision and Sound: Their Stories
Viewing comments for Chapter 34 "A Glimpse of the Past"Two souls that meet as strangers on earth.
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Comment from robina1978
This chapter they approach the father, who is also the head
of the church. Julia goes with the girl and fully confronts him. Now the next chapter.
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This chapter they approach the father, who is also the head
of the church. Julia goes with the girl and fully confronts him. Now the next chapter.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2014
Comment from faragon
Very well written discourse between all involved members. I do think that Julia can be a bit of a brat at times. She seems unbending. I do think you have them starting to believe her a bit. Perhaps if she is more specific about her past lives in terms of oral proof they may believe her more. Good job!
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Very well written discourse between all involved members. I do think that Julia can be a bit of a brat at times. She seems unbending. I do think you have them starting to believe her a bit. Perhaps if she is more specific about her past lives in terms of oral proof they may believe her more. Good job!
Comment Written 23-Oct-2014
Comment from CR Delport
Anything that opposes conventional thinking is always frowned upon, especially when it comes to religion and the church. As always, this is very well written and makes for interesting reading.
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Anything that opposes conventional thinking is always frowned upon, especially when it comes to religion and the church. As always, this is very well written and makes for interesting reading.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2014
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Very well done, Mikey. Julia is mature and wise, but then she recalls hundreds of years of lives before this one, so she is really very old in mind, if not in current body. Great plot element. :)
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Very well done, Mikey. Julia is mature and wise, but then she recalls hundreds of years of lives before this one, so she is really very old in mind, if not in current body. Great plot element. :)
Comment Written 23-Oct-2014
Comment from nordicgirl
This is a wonderful and scathing indictment of the church as it exists today. How smart to use the story to state such a compelling argument. That todays church sounds perfectly in place in the dark ages is chilling. Characyers and dialogue remain vivid. Terrific story!!!
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This is a wonderful and scathing indictment of the church as it exists today. How smart to use the story to state such a compelling argument. That todays church sounds perfectly in place in the dark ages is chilling. Characyers and dialogue remain vivid. Terrific story!!!
Comment Written 23-Oct-2014
Comment from Joe_P
This is very-well written. It is an enlightening commentary concerning the early church, its opulence and disdain for the masses.
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This is very-well written. It is an enlightening commentary concerning the early church, its opulence and disdain for the masses.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2014
Comment from Michaelk
Wow! You're not a big fan of the church in general are you? Or is this all just the way that time period was?
I found Julia's point about the romans murdering Jesus very interesting. I don't know how your going to try to convince Leopold of anything. Good chapter, looking forward to the next.
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Wow! You're not a big fan of the church in general are you? Or is this all just the way that time period was?
I found Julia's point about the romans murdering Jesus very interesting. I don't know how your going to try to convince Leopold of anything. Good chapter, looking forward to the next.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2014
Comment from Jay Squires
"Yes, beautiful- it is that. [Only use one dash for a hyphen. Use two dashes to separate clauses.]
"No one is safe from the church,Valerius [This continues for four sentences before the reader realizes it is Julia speaking. Suggest a tag after this sentence. I thought at first it was Thurston.]
Your writing sparkles, Mikey. You've got to see about getting it published.
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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014
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"Yes, beautiful- it is that. [Only use one dash for a hyphen. Use two dashes to separate clauses.]
"No one is safe from the church,Valerius [This continues for four sentences before the reader realizes it is Julia speaking. Suggest a tag after this sentence. I thought at first it was Thurston.]
Your writing sparkles, Mikey. You've got to see about getting it published.
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Comment Written 22-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014
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I think I see. It would read: "Yes, beautiful-- it is that." Is that correct. I have difficulty indicating a pause. I throw in ellipses, but I use too many. I reworded that section a bit upon rereading it. I could see why it would be confusing. Good tip. I don't have the first clue about publishing. I wasn't that good before. Hahaha. I'll start to consider it though. Thank you! mikey
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That's how it would read, except no space fore or aft. Did you see what I meant about Julia's tag after the first sentence. Not that you agree, but I didn't know whether you saw it.
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Oh. Yes, I see what you mean. I put a tag of sorts before she speaks. I do agree.
Comment from gypsycaravan
This chapter brought a subject to mind that bothers me a lot. Most religions and churches have elaborate and expensive surroundings. If they are really so loving and charitable, why do they need these trappings.? There would be more money available for good works and helping those less fortunate.
Julia may sound resigne to listening to a plan, but when her visions become active, she seems to lose control. I hope she is not responsible for evil happening to those who love and try to protect her.
One typo:
villagers would enjoy poking is with sticks---'is' should be 'us'
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This chapter brought a subject to mind that bothers me a lot. Most religions and churches have elaborate and expensive surroundings. If they are really so loving and charitable, why do they need these trappings.? There would be more money available for good works and helping those less fortunate.
Julia may sound resigne to listening to a plan, but when her visions become active, she seems to lose control. I hope she is not responsible for evil happening to those who love and try to protect her.
One typo:
villagers would enjoy poking is with sticks---'is' should be 'us'
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Comment Written 22-Oct-2014
