Vision and Sound: Their Stories
Viewing comments for Chapter 38 "Leopold Attacks, Julia Responds."Two souls that meet as strangers on earth.
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Comment from Sankey
I know this is fiction but so much truth in there my friend. Some clergy are to be questioned on some of their proclamations hehe!
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I know this is fiction but so much truth in there my friend. Some clergy are to be questioned on some of their proclamations hehe!
Comment Written 30-Oct-2014
Comment from Jay Squires
Valerius looked as though he had mentioned a summer shower that had passed. [Was that his tone? Or the look on his face?]
With eyes the color of resolve [I don't know, Mikey, I think this is overdoing a metaphor.]
If piety could become twisted into an expression of evil, [Is it my imagination or are you using a lot of "if this ... then this..." parallels. It was clever when you mentioned Leopold's resemblance to a court prosecutor, but it seems to me you keep using them. I'm kinda tired, so that might be it, but just consider it...]
The Bishop spoke of a priest not a half days ride [not a half DAY'S ride...]
"A priest possessed by demons, you say. [Suggest a dialogue tag here. We don't know for three more sentences who's speaking.]
WHOA!!! What a dynamic final paragraph, Mikey! Ya gotta love her! She would make a good defense for herself, turning toward the jury... LOL, sorry. I really don't want to take anything away from this paragraph!
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2014
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Valerius looked as though he had mentioned a summer shower that had passed. [Was that his tone? Or the look on his face?]
With eyes the color of resolve [I don't know, Mikey, I think this is overdoing a metaphor.]
If piety could become twisted into an expression of evil, [Is it my imagination or are you using a lot of "if this ... then this..." parallels. It was clever when you mentioned Leopold's resemblance to a court prosecutor, but it seems to me you keep using them. I'm kinda tired, so that might be it, but just consider it...]
The Bishop spoke of a priest not a half days ride [not a half DAY'S ride...]
"A priest possessed by demons, you say. [Suggest a dialogue tag here. We don't know for three more sentences who's speaking.]
WHOA!!! What a dynamic final paragraph, Mikey! Ya gotta love her! She would make a good defense for herself, turning toward the jury... LOL, sorry. I really don't want to take anything away from this paragraph!
Comment Written 30-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2014
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Yes. Thank you for pointing that out. I was getting that feeling myself like, "what are you doing Mr. Metaphor?"
Let them know it is Julia right away. Okay, that's why I cut in when I did. Earlier IS better. This was suppossed to be a series of short stories, but I LOVE this story!! Thanks again for your help. These are all points that add a lot to the read. mikey
Comment from CR Delport
What a great comeback by Julia. This Leopold is definitely using the Lord's name for his own twisted pleasure, but they see right through him. Another well crafted chapter.
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What a great comeback by Julia. This Leopold is definitely using the Lord's name for his own twisted pleasure, but they see right through him. Another well crafted chapter.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2014
Comment from nordicgirl
I must say that you keep raising the bar in this story. Wow!! Incredible tension and oh so believable interaction by real flesh and blood people. Just wonderful!
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I must say that you keep raising the bar in this story. Wow!! Incredible tension and oh so believable interaction by real flesh and blood people. Just wonderful!
Comment Written 30-Oct-2014
Comment from Michaelk
Good for Julia. she's turning the tables on old Leo. This was quite the tense chapter. At one point I half expected Leo to pull a dagger out of his cloak and stab Julia with it on the spot. Absolutely brilliant for them to start playing, pretending to see invisible beasts to try to diffuse the situation. And Julia's paragraph at the end was simply sublime. I'll be curious to see if she continues to press her advantage or if someone pulls her back.
Excellent chapter.
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Good for Julia. she's turning the tables on old Leo. This was quite the tense chapter. At one point I half expected Leo to pull a dagger out of his cloak and stab Julia with it on the spot. Absolutely brilliant for them to start playing, pretending to see invisible beasts to try to diffuse the situation. And Julia's paragraph at the end was simply sublime. I'll be curious to see if she continues to press her advantage or if someone pulls her back.
Excellent chapter.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2014
Comment from amahra
Wow, starting this book at chapter 38 is going to be real hard for me. But I'll do my best. What I read was interesting and the author notes helped a lot. And I do know a little about the early church in Rome.
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reply by the author on 30-Oct-2014
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Wow, starting this book at chapter 38 is going to be real hard for me. But I'll do my best. What I read was interesting and the author notes helped a lot. And I do know a little about the early church in Rome.
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reply by the author on 30-Oct-2014
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Hi. The story is a little strange, so that might make it easier in this case. It is about two souls that meet over and over in different lifetimes. This current lifetime is number four and then there will be more. The two souls are Valerius and Julia in this story. They've been other people in past lives. They don't usually know or remember anything about past lives or that they know each other in heaven, but in this story Julia does have memories of past lives, but she doesn't exactly know what they are. Haha! That sounds confusing to me too! Anyway when this segment ends, another story begins in a different setting, maybe the middle ages, I don't know, haven't decided. Pleased your reading. This turned out to be a fun time period so it kind of stretched out a bit. :) mikey
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That really is original. Hollywood is always looking for something new and fresh. Ok, I'll stick with it. It sounds interesting.
Comment from GracieAnn
Mikey, this contains very convincing and clever dialogue as surface things mildly hide those deep and dangerous undertones. The intimation that Julia manages has turned the so called man of God back on his own words. Well done. Nice layering of shades of meaning. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
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Mikey, this contains very convincing and clever dialogue as surface things mildly hide those deep and dangerous undertones. The intimation that Julia manages has turned the so called man of God back on his own words. Well done. Nice layering of shades of meaning. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
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Comment from seaglass
Good debate going on here. Those who do such evil as persecuting others under the pretense of serving god is truly led by Satan. This will set him even more against him but help enlighten the others.
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Good debate going on here. Those who do such evil as persecuting others under the pretense of serving god is truly led by Satan. This will set him even more against him but help enlighten the others.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2014
