Vision and Sound: Their Stories
Viewing comments for Chapter 52 "Compassion For the Heartless"Two souls that meet as strangers on earth.
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Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Another good scene, and there goes that moron Leopold still attacking. Maybe NOW he'll get himself killed. I sure hope so. I hope it's painful and he suffers even more before he descends in eternal damnation of hellfire. Serves the stupid bastard right. :)
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Another good scene, and there goes that moron Leopold still attacking. Maybe NOW he'll get himself killed. I sure hope so. I hope it's painful and he suffers even more before he descends in eternal damnation of hellfire. Serves the stupid bastard right. :)
Comment Written 30-Nov-2014
Comment from Sankey
Wow! Good work again my friend. Going well plenty of blood and gore and heresy from two stupid old me. Looking forward to where wqe are going with this. Some spags.
They suspected Julia and the others w(-h)ere in there.
She help(d)
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Wow! Good work again my friend. Going well plenty of blood and gore and heresy from two stupid old me. Looking forward to where wqe are going with this. Some spags.
They suspected Julia and the others w(-h)ere in there.
She help(d)
Comment Written 30-Nov-2014
Comment from Jay Squires
Tension-filled, powerful to the end. I'm glad you didn't make Leopold a happy convert. Great cliffhanger.
but it was intricately appointed with scenes of nature. [This is difficult for me to understand, Mikey.]
She help it in anticipation. [????]
It is you that are possessed. [Use "who" instead of "that" for animate objects.]
You will be scared, but you will survive. [You will be SCARRED, but...]
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Tension-filled, powerful to the end. I'm glad you didn't make Leopold a happy convert. Great cliffhanger.
but it was intricately appointed with scenes of nature. [This is difficult for me to understand, Mikey.]
She help it in anticipation. [????]
It is you that are possessed. [Use "who" instead of "that" for animate objects.]
You will be scared, but you will survive. [You will be SCARRED, but...]
Comment Written 30-Nov-2014
Comment from seaglass
No! Somebody stop him! Great chapter and the spiritual blindness well described.
One awkward sentence.
"She help it in anticipation." (Something needs fixed here.)
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No! Somebody stop him! Great chapter and the spiritual blindness well described.
One awkward sentence.
"She help it in anticipation." (Something needs fixed here.)
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Comment Written 30-Nov-2014
Comment from CR Delport
Leopold is so far gone that he listens to now word or reason, nor do he recognize the kindness of Julia and Trellitia. He still wants to harm them. I hope Valerius arrives in time. Another well crafted chapter.
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Leopold is so far gone that he listens to now word or reason, nor do he recognize the kindness of Julia and Trellitia. He still wants to harm them. I hope Valerius arrives in time. Another well crafted chapter.
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Comment Written 30-Nov-2014
Comment from nordicgirl
Another exceptional chapter. The immediate compassion of Julia and the others is telling as is the continued hatred of the priests even as those they are out to harm assist them. Wonderful philosophical remarks by Julia. Just excellent. Still leaving us tense as can be!!!!
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Another exceptional chapter. The immediate compassion of Julia and the others is telling as is the continued hatred of the priests even as those they are out to harm assist them. Wonderful philosophical remarks by Julia. Just excellent. Still leaving us tense as can be!!!!
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
