Comment from Sankey

Excellent

Good work again mate. Shock horror I don't believe there were any spags this time around. Keep at it mate. Fixed up the song in Chapter 22 of my book if you have not heard that yet have to click it six time for six verses if you want.

 Comment Written 11-Dec-2014

Comment from Jay Squires

Excellent

The plotline gallops right along at a fine pace, Mikey.

I found only a few concerns:

almost comically, if one had been there [AS ?? if one had been...]

Now, we have no time for this now, my friend. [Using "now" here twice seems awkward. You also follow with "now" in the next sentence.]

All good things must end. I'll be sorry, in a way, that this will be one of them.




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 Comment Written 11-Dec-2014

Comment from CR Delport

Excellent

I think the wolf that guided the Oracle to Trellitia will puzzle him for some time :) For now, Julia and Valerius safe, but Cicero is not done. At least Cervantes saw the light. Mikey, another well crafted chapter.
Trellitia and a man you do not know, as well. --- and a man I don't know ???
Have a great day,
Christelle.

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 Comment Written 11-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2014

Oh, that was Cervantes telling Thurston the Oracle was with Trellitia. Thurston wouldn't know who the Oracle is. So glad you liked the chapter. I have to find away to wrap this up pretty soon. I can't have everyone wandering around like Moses for the next forty years. :)