The I A C Murders
Valentine's Horror Club Entry18 total reviews
Comment from Y. M. Roger
He disappeared to strike again... :) :) LOL!! Okay, Ron, this is quite entertaining, sir! :) Are you stupid, I am cupid.... it could become immortal like 'this is an ex-parrot' or 'Holy hand grenade, Batman'.... LOL! ;) ;) Thanx so much for the big grin for the evening, sir -- you definitely put a smile for the weekend out here! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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He disappeared to strike again... :) :) LOL!! Okay, Ron, this is quite entertaining, sir! :) Are you stupid, I am cupid.... it could become immortal like 'this is an ex-parrot' or 'Holy hand grenade, Batman'.... LOL! ;) ;) Thanx so much for the big grin for the evening, sir -- you definitely put a smile for the weekend out here! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 14-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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Hey, Yvette, hello. Thank you for the fantastic review. I'm glad you liked this silly little piece. I was just in one of those moods. Lol. I had just as much fun creating these silly pictures to go with it. Lol. I'm glad it put a smile on your face. Have a great rest of your weekend, Y. Thank you again.
Ron
Comment from LyndaS
Wow! "Killer" entry in the Horror Club challenge. The flow of this story poem is excellent and keeps your attention throughout. This is a fun tale about Cupid falling over the edge and taking matters into his own hands. Yes, you need to get this into a contest if possible. Very well written and an exceptional Valentine's Day write. Loved the art especially the angry little cuss at the bottom. Well done!! Lynda
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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Wow! "Killer" entry in the Horror Club challenge. The flow of this story poem is excellent and keeps your attention throughout. This is a fun tale about Cupid falling over the edge and taking matters into his own hands. Yes, you need to get this into a contest if possible. Very well written and an exceptional Valentine's Day write. Loved the art especially the angry little cuss at the bottom. Well done!! Lynda
Comment Written 14-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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Hahaha. Yeah, he fell over the edge all right. Thank you so much for the fantastic review and the giant sixer, Lynda. I had nearly just as much fun creating these pictures as writing the silly piece. I like playing with my art program. I'm glad you liked this murderous tale, L. Thank you again. Have a great rest of your weekend.
Ron
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Any time. Great post!
Comment from Sally Law
Adorably wicked fun. No wonder it qualifies for the contest. You did a superb job with this.
A few suggestions for your consideration.
My copy editor just told me AM looks better and is perfectly acceptable in writing. I agree and I am set to publish my crime novella in two weeks. I think it would look clearer if you did the same.
Second, in the last stanza, replace the period with a comma after I am Cupid. Yours reads,
"Are you stupid? I am Cupid."
and then he disappeared.
I suggest--
"Are you stupid? I am Cupid,"
and then he disappeared.
Or, if you like the period, capitalize "And." A period demands capitalization.
I hope this is helpful. A wonderful entry for the contest Joan.
All my best,
Sal xo
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Adorably wicked fun. No wonder it qualifies for the contest. You did a superb job with this.
A few suggestions for your consideration.
My copy editor just told me AM looks better and is perfectly acceptable in writing. I agree and I am set to publish my crime novella in two weeks. I think it would look clearer if you did the same.
Second, in the last stanza, replace the period with a comma after I am Cupid. Yours reads,
"Are you stupid? I am Cupid."
and then he disappeared.
I suggest--
"Are you stupid? I am Cupid,"
and then he disappeared.
Or, if you like the period, capitalize "And." A period demands capitalization.
I hope this is helpful. A wonderful entry for the contest Joan.
All my best,
Sal xo
Comment Written 14-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Thank you for the great review and help, Sal. I fixed it. I really appreciate the generous stars. I wish you luck with novella. Have a great Valentine's day.
(Ron)
Comment from Pantygynt
If this were true there wouldn't be many left to read this narrative poem, the likes of which I have not come across before. I detected a touch of the Lord Macaulay. I think the metre is similar to that of the Lays of Ancient Rome and, come to think about it, this is all about the lays of Elm street and main and how they got their come-uppance.
Great horrific fun.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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If this were true there wouldn't be many left to read this narrative poem, the likes of which I have not come across before. I detected a touch of the Lord Macaulay. I think the metre is similar to that of the Lays of Ancient Rome and, come to think about it, this is all about the lays of Elm street and main and how they got their come-uppance.
Great horrific fun.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Lol. Thank you for the great review and generous stars, Pantygynt. I'm glad you liked this twisted little tale. Have a great weekend, friend.
Ron
Comment from papa55mike
That is amazing. I love the pictures especially Cupid. What a wonderfully written poem and I love the rhyme. I wish I had a six. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
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reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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That is amazing. I love the pictures especially Cupid. What a wonderfully written poem and I love the rhyme. I wish I had a six. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
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Comment Written 14-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Thank you for the fantastic review and big six offer, Mike. I really appreciate the comments, friend. Have a great weekend.
Ron
Comment from Diana L Crawford
Wow! this is really incredibly creative! appreciate you did under the club, but what happened to entering in the Rhyming Contest? It would really have been an excellent one! thank you for sharing this awesome story about poor cupid, the Valentine killer! haha! xoxoxoxo
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reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Wow! this is really incredibly creative! appreciate you did under the club, but what happened to entering in the Rhyming Contest? It would really have been an excellent one! thank you for sharing this awesome story about poor cupid, the Valentine killer! haha! xoxoxoxo
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Comment Written 14-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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I tried but never got the dropdown option. I contacted Tom about it. We'll see what happens. Maybe he'll put it in the contest hopefully. Thank you for the great review and club idea, Diana. I had fun with it. Have a wonderful Valentine's.
Ron
Comment from Natalie Goodwin
This will undoubtedly be my favorite poem for the day. "Are you stupid? I am cupid." I like that you told a story in poetic form. I also liked the rhyme pattern. Good work.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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This will undoubtedly be my favorite poem for the day. "Are you stupid? I am cupid." I like that you told a story in poetic form. I also liked the rhyme pattern. Good work.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Thank you so much for the fantastic review and giant sixer, Natalie. Yeah, I like to write stories in poetry form. I find it challenging. I really appreciate the gracious rating. Thank you again. Have a wonderful Valentine's.
Ron
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello Dragonskulls, a tgiFriday to you. I hope this finds you well in good health and spirit. Wow, that was a great piece of poetic work my friend. The flow and rhymes were great and you told the story in poetic perfection. Great job my friend, six stars all the way all day!
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Hello Dragonskulls, a tgiFriday to you. I hope this finds you well in good health and spirit. Wow, that was a great piece of poetic work my friend. The flow and rhymes were great and you told the story in poetic perfection. Great job my friend, six stars all the way all day!
Comment Written 14-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Hey, 13, hi. A great Friday to you as well. Thank you for the fantastic review and the big sixer, friend. I'm glad you liked my little tale of a murderous Cupid. Lol. Have an awesome weekend and thank you again.
Ron
