The 18th Hole
Contest prompt -- rhymed poem life changing event35 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
The "fairway in the sky" is a lovely metaphor. The tribute resonates with happy memories for the "family circle". I enjoyed the rhyme scheme as well.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2009
The "fairway in the sky" is a lovely metaphor. The tribute resonates with happy memories for the "family circle". I enjoyed the rhyme scheme as well.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2009
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Thank you so much for the wonderful review and such great comments.
Comment from smiles
I'm not a golfer, but still for this day I anticipate.
Great work. Creative flow on Idea!
I like the rhyming structure. Light, but yet a definite life change.
smiles
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2009
I'm not a golfer, but still for this day I anticipate.
Great work. Creative flow on Idea!
I like the rhyming structure. Light, but yet a definite life change.
smiles
Comment Written 20-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2009
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Thank you so much for the wonderful review and such great comments.
Comment from sara-beth
Oh, this is sad but beautiful. You created a lovely heaven for the one in question, with very descriptive imagery. The lines flowed well, giving the overall impression of great writing.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2009
Oh, this is sad but beautiful. You created a lovely heaven for the one in question, with very descriptive imagery. The lines flowed well, giving the overall impression of great writing.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2009
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Thank you for the kind and supportive review. I appreciate it a lot.
Comment from MJMuraco
This contest is going to be tough. I loved your poem and it had great rhythm. I never would have thought of golf as a life changing event but I do get the message of your poem. Very nicely done and the photo is perfect. Good Luck with the contest.
MJ
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2009
This contest is going to be tough. I loved your poem and it had great rhythm. I never would have thought of golf as a life changing event but I do get the message of your poem. Very nicely done and the photo is perfect. Good Luck with the contest.
MJ
Comment Written 19-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2009
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Thank you for your review and kind comments. I appreciate your good wishes.
Comment from shimmeringlights
This is so full of love and sadness, your words flow right off the page, a great way to remember someone who must have been very dear to you. Its written with astounding beauty, heartfelt emotion, excellent rhyme and meter. I wish you the best.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2009
This is so full of love and sadness, your words flow right off the page, a great way to remember someone who must have been very dear to you. Its written with astounding beauty, heartfelt emotion, excellent rhyme and meter. I wish you the best.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2009
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Thanks for the great review. It was for my father in law.
Comment from Roisin
This is beautiful and very, very sad. Brought a tear to my eye. You've certainly written of a huge life changing event - with perfect rhymes and great flow. A great entry to the contest. Good luck.
Warm regards.
Roisin
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2009
This is beautiful and very, very sad. Brought a tear to my eye. You've certainly written of a huge life changing event - with perfect rhymes and great flow. A great entry to the contest. Good luck.
Warm regards.
Roisin
Comment Written 19-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2009
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Thank you for your supportive review and kind comments. Death does change life.... everyone's!!
Comment from adewpearl
I love your vision of eternal life for one who meant so much to you as one where he spends his time in a perfect round of golf, an activity obviously close to his heart - there is a generosity of spirit in your vision - nice cadence and strong rhymes enhance the message. Brooke
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2009
I love your vision of eternal life for one who meant so much to you as one where he spends his time in a perfect round of golf, an activity obviously close to his heart - there is a generosity of spirit in your vision - nice cadence and strong rhymes enhance the message. Brooke
Comment Written 19-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2009
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Thanks for the great review. I appreciate it.
Comment from EllenV
I enjoyed your poem, Kathy, although I have never in my life golfed and don't know a thing about it. But what fond memories you have of a loved one who this sport meant a lot to, and who was obviously very good at it. It is so nice when family members enjoy doing things like this together.
ellen
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2009
I enjoyed your poem, Kathy, although I have never in my life golfed and don't know a thing about it. But what fond memories you have of a loved one who this sport meant a lot to, and who was obviously very good at it. It is so nice when family members enjoy doing things like this together.
ellen
Comment Written 19-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2009
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Thanks for the great review. I appreciate it.
Comment from Judian James
My husband is an avid golfer! Every March he gets very antsy and usually travels with a bunch of his buddies from the club to southern climes to play before our local club opens in May! This was a perfect golfer's heaven piece!
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2009
My husband is an avid golfer! Every March he gets very antsy and usually travels with a bunch of his buddies from the club to southern climes to play before our local club opens in May! This was a perfect golfer's heaven piece!
Comment Written 19-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2009
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Thanks for the great review. I appreciate it.
Comment from Donovan
I think the do play golf in heaven....this is a good metaphor. I will be your caddy..but we are not walking..We are taking a cart.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2009
I think the do play golf in heaven....this is a good metaphor. I will be your caddy..but we are not walking..We are taking a cart.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2009
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Rent a fast one... I think time goes quickly in heaven.
Thanks so much for the encouraging review. I like your comments. They always make me smile.