Reality Fades
a Triolet poetic form21 total reviews
Comment from Patrick Bernardy
Hey Melissa!
I am so happy to be able to review your poetry! Like most people here, I have way more people's work I would like to review than I have time for!
I can tell right away that your poetry skill is ample! The triolet is one of the few poetry forms I have never tried; I am hoping to give it a shot the next time I see a contest come around. When I look at form poetry, I always look at rhythm first, because bouncy iambic rhythm is my favorite! This poem does this beautifully!
---"the rushing pace of life is stayed/frustration lulls and slowly fades" --This is my favorite section, but the entire poem is excellent.
A 'back to nature" theme is very common in poetry, and rightly so. Especially with our world spinning ever faster, the desire to slow it all down "within the cool of dappled shade" is enticing. Thank you for sharing your poetry! I look forward to reading more! (In fact, I think Ima slide over to the one you just posted next!)
Patrick
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Hey Melissa!
I am so happy to be able to review your poetry! Like most people here, I have way more people's work I would like to review than I have time for!
I can tell right away that your poetry skill is ample! The triolet is one of the few poetry forms I have never tried; I am hoping to give it a shot the next time I see a contest come around. When I look at form poetry, I always look at rhythm first, because bouncy iambic rhythm is my favorite! This poem does this beautifully!
---"the rushing pace of life is stayed/frustration lulls and slowly fades" --This is my favorite section, but the entire poem is excellent.
A 'back to nature" theme is very common in poetry, and rightly so. Especially with our world spinning ever faster, the desire to slow it all down "within the cool of dappled shade" is enticing. Thank you for sharing your poetry! I look forward to reading more! (In fact, I think Ima slide over to the one you just posted next!)
Patrick
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
I've never read a Triolet before, but I will now. This poem was enjoyable to read and the perfectly matched photo, wonderful. The movement within this poem paints a picture. I hope to try one some day. Best wishes, Alex
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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I've never read a Triolet before, but I will now. This poem was enjoyable to read and the perfectly matched photo, wonderful. The movement within this poem paints a picture. I hope to try one some day. Best wishes, Alex
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Thanks so much Alex!m. Hugs!
Meliss
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Youre welcome, Melissa! Hugs!!
Comment from Brenda Strauser
I enjoyed reading this poem. The picture goes well with the poem. Written well. I'm just learning about poems. I didn't realize there are so many different kinds. This is an interesting pattern
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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I enjoyed reading this poem. The picture goes well with the poem. Written well. I'm just learning about poems. I didn't realize there are so many different kinds. This is an interesting pattern
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Hello Brenda. Thank you. I enjoy writing poetry and learned all that I know about it right here on FanStory. It's a great place to learn. Thanks again.
Melissa
Comment from Sally Law
Dear Melissa,
There are not enough sixes to give! This is a beautifully written and illustrated triolet. It's simplicity and repeated lines appeal to me. I must try this.
Sublime! Sending you my best today as always.
Sal Xoxo
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Dear Melissa,
There are not enough sixes to give! This is a beautifully written and illustrated triolet. It's simplicity and repeated lines appeal to me. I must try this.
Sublime! Sending you my best today as always.
Sal Xoxo
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Thank you sweet Sal! I went on Shadowpoetry.com and looked around at different poetic forms. This Triolet caught my eye. Glad you enjoyed it, my friend.
Melissa
Comment from Ulla
Hi Melissa. I'm so glad you're back posting your lovely poetry on a regular basis. I so enjoyed this triolet poem. It's just beautifully written and with a wonderful imagery. A hug, Ulla xcx
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Hi Melissa. I'm so glad you're back posting your lovely poetry on a regular basis. I so enjoyed this triolet poem. It's just beautifully written and with a wonderful imagery. A hug, Ulla xcx
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Thank you sweet Ulla! I went on Shadowpoetry.com and looked around at different poetic forms. This Triolet form caught my eye. Glad you enjoyed it, my friend.
Melissa
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
Melissa,
This is a great poem. I don't think I have every heard of a Triolet until today. It's a very interest style. The rhyme scheme is great and I like the droning bees.
I always feel bad when I mow the grass, because the bees seem to like the dandelions.
Well done my friend.
Cecilia
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Melissa,
This is a great poem. I don't think I have every heard of a Triolet until today. It's a very interest style. The rhyme scheme is great and I like the droning bees.
I always feel bad when I mow the grass, because the bees seem to like the dandelions.
Well done my friend.
Cecilia
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Thank you sweet Cecilia! I went on Shadowpoetry.com and looked around at different poetic forms. This Triolet form caught my eye. Glad you enjoyed it, my friend.
Melissa
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You're welcome my sweet friend.
Comment from Debbie Pope
Wow! Wow! Wow! Faced with your skill, I'm speechless. Seriously. You picked such a hard format. All that rhyming and repeating! I could not do it. The repeating makes it a little easier, makes for less lines to write. But then it makes it harder because they have to flow in all positions.
Remarkable job.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Wow! Wow! Wow! Faced with your skill, I'm speechless. Seriously. You picked such a hard format. All that rhyming and repeating! I could not do it. The repeating makes it a little easier, makes for less lines to write. But then it makes it harder because they have to flow in all positions.
Remarkable job.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Thank you sweet Debbie! I went on Shadowpoetry.com and looked around at different poetic forms. This Triolet form caught my eye. Glad you enjoyed it, my friend. I so appreciate you!!
Melissa
Comment from judiverse
Great use of monorhyme, and excellent repeating lines. Your word choices are interesting. I especially like dappled shade. This presents a feeling of calm and peace. It is wonderful to find a place where the rushing pace of life is stayed. Excellent work. judi
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Great use of monorhyme, and excellent repeating lines. Your word choices are interesting. I especially like dappled shade. This presents a feeling of calm and peace. It is wonderful to find a place where the rushing pace of life is stayed. Excellent work. judi
Comment Written 07-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Thank you so much for your lovely review, Judi. I so appreciate it your thoughts on it, my friend.
Melissa
Comment from Jasmine Girl
I just love this sentence of "slow, droning bees sing serenades." The buzzing of the bees may sound annoy but if it is a serenade, it must be beautiful. I only see one rhyming among all eight lines.
Well done.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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I just love this sentence of "slow, droning bees sing serenades." The buzzing of the bees may sound annoy but if it is a serenade, it must be beautiful. I only see one rhyming among all eight lines.
Well done.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Thank you sweet Lisa! I went on Shadowpoetry.com and looked around at different poetic forms. This Triolet form caught my eye. Glad you enjoyed it, my friend. I used the same rhyme but added an 's' to the end to give it a change to meet the requirements.
Melissa
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very well written, triolet and I enjoyed very much listening to it. I wish you the very best with all you write and may God bless you. Patricia.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2025
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This is a very well written, triolet and I enjoyed very much listening to it. I wish you the very best with all you write and may God bless you. Patricia.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2025
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Hello Patricia. Thanks so much!!
Melissa
