Burn It All Down
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "Beneath the Ice"A war of a few against a syndicate
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Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Hi Marilyn,
This is the first chapter I've read in your book. It is very action packed with lots of description that helps set the scene. You use figurative language that helps build and maintain interest. Lots going on, which you organize well.
Great job,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2025
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Hi Marilyn,
This is the first chapter I've read in your book. It is very action packed with lots of description that helps set the scene. You use figurative language that helps build and maintain interest. Lots going on, which you organize well.
Great job,
Rhonda
Comment Written 13-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2025
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you never know where these two guys are going to endup
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I really enjoyed this chapter! The way you set the atmosphere with the
tunnel and eerie silence made me feel the tension! The creepy creatures
kept me hooked. I loved the way you built up the mystery. The dialogue flows so naturally - it feels real. The action scenes were intense too.
Great work - I can't wait to see where this journey leads next!
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2025
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I really enjoyed this chapter! The way you set the atmosphere with the
tunnel and eerie silence made me feel the tension! The creepy creatures
kept me hooked. I loved the way you built up the mystery. The dialogue flows so naturally - it feels real. The action scenes were intense too.
Great work - I can't wait to see where this journey leads next!
Comment Written 13-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2025
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lol, thankyou
