Vision and Sound: Their Stories
Viewing comments for Chapter 45 "Who To Trust"Two souls that meet as strangers on earth.
15 total reviews
Comment from Antoine Charlemaine
I really enjoyed the conversation between Cervantes and Thurston. You bring out many theological truths convincingly. You have some knowledge, or background, of these things, clearly. Your dialogue is not only believable, but convincing, with the 'ring of truth' which is difficult to achieve when writing about these kind of things. The tension continues to build, slowly but surely, towards some climactic end. There is much trouble to come...
Anthony
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I really enjoyed the conversation between Cervantes and Thurston. You bring out many theological truths convincingly. You have some knowledge, or background, of these things, clearly. Your dialogue is not only believable, but convincing, with the 'ring of truth' which is difficult to achieve when writing about these kind of things. The tension continues to build, slowly but surely, towards some climactic end. There is much trouble to come...
Anthony
Comment Written 18-Nov-2014
Comment from Nosha17
The plot does indeed thicken with the priests the leading co-conspirators. Good job there are allies on the side of right to protect the innocent. Well narrated and most enjoyable as always. faye
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The plot does indeed thicken with the priests the leading co-conspirators. Good job there are allies on the side of right to protect the innocent. Well narrated and most enjoyable as always. faye
Comment Written 17-Nov-2014
Comment from Gargantuan2
Very nice and only one suggestion this time:
He may not fully aware
He may not be fully aware
This is the first I have spotted in quite some time. You do very well. Until next time:)
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Very nice and only one suggestion this time:
He may not fully aware
He may not be fully aware
This is the first I have spotted in quite some time. You do very well. Until next time:)
Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
Comment from CR Delport
Well, at least Father Thurston is wise enough not to trust Cervantes. Leopold has him hooked. A lot of cloak and dagger stuff going on at the moment. It makes for great reading. Good job.
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Well, at least Father Thurston is wise enough not to trust Cervantes. Leopold has him hooked. A lot of cloak and dagger stuff going on at the moment. It makes for great reading. Good job.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
Comment from angelface2
I get so caught up in your story I forget to look for any errors, but I don't think I found any. Your writing is very good. :>D Miss Sally
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I get so caught up in your story I forget to look for any errors, but I don't think I found any. Your writing is very good. :>D Miss Sally
Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
Comment from ProjectBluebook
Another excellent chapter. Looks ship-shape. No obvious SPAG errors. Lot of script, building character and personality with each character. I can feel this desolate time. Enjoyed it. Count your doubloon. wackydo
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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Another excellent chapter. Looks ship-shape. No obvious SPAG errors. Lot of script, building character and personality with each character. I can feel this desolate time. Enjoyed it. Count your doubloon. wackydo
Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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Hey bro, wondered where ya was. What a great review. Posting anything tonight? Not sure what to post. Maybe some chapters, contests, I don't know. Getting late. Check your mail. mikey
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Watchin' Sunday night football. Been watchin' football most of the day, done a couple reviews during halftime and breaks. later Lion King
Comment from seaglass
Love the last line...reminds my of the scripture that refers to "those who will kill, believing they do God a favor."
"Father Thurston stopped to (great) a family..." (greet)
Funny how I can see yours and not my own. Sanky has to find mine. lol
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Love the last line...reminds my of the scripture that refers to "those who will kill, believing they do God a favor."
"Father Thurston stopped to (great) a family..." (greet)
Funny how I can see yours and not my own. Sanky has to find mine. lol
Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
The tension mounts. I'm glad to hear they plan to move the kids and Julia to the forest. I sure hope they do it in time... why wait even a minute? Shudder. You do a great job of making me despise Leopold. I would love to see him killed somehow, maybe by an act of God, even. Just destroy the bastard! Your stories often scare me, Mikey. But then I'm pretty easy to scare. :)
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The tension mounts. I'm glad to hear they plan to move the kids and Julia to the forest. I sure hope they do it in time... why wait even a minute? Shudder. You do a great job of making me despise Leopold. I would love to see him killed somehow, maybe by an act of God, even. Just destroy the bastard! Your stories often scare me, Mikey. But then I'm pretty easy to scare. :)
Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
Comment from Sasha
Every time I read another chapter, I get nervous butterflies in my stomach. You are doing such a terrific job with this story. Not knowing how it will end is emotionally painful, to say the least. Keep up the great work.
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Every time I read another chapter, I get nervous butterflies in my stomach. You are doing such a terrific job with this story. Not knowing how it will end is emotionally painful, to say the least. Keep up the great work.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
Comment from robina1978
I missed a few chapters as you probably noticed but with your intro it is easy to catch up. They are in danger, will be taken to a secret hiding place but they won't be safe there either.
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I missed a few chapters as you probably noticed but with your intro it is easy to catch up. They are in danger, will be taken to a secret hiding place but they won't be safe there either.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
