Willing Hearts
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Comment from Sankey
Another great chapter. I am so sorry I am a bit late. You have done well, as usual. we must be bearing the end of this book? Not sure how much romancing we will see before closure?
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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Another great chapter. I am so sorry I am a bit late. You have done well, as usual. we must be bearing the end of this book? Not sure how much romancing we will see before closure?
Comment Written 09-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from nomi338
All good stories have moments of conflict. Some disrupt the harmony of relationships, some strengthen relationships. I am so glad that the conflict in this one served to strengthen Noah and Sami's relationship. Great job of story telling.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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All good stories have moments of conflict. Some disrupt the harmony of relationships, some strengthen relationships. I am so glad that the conflict in this one served to strengthen Noah and Sami's relationship. Great job of story telling.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Jacob1395
I really hope this doesn't mean the end of Sami and Noah's relationship, I could really feel the hurt Sami could after seeing Noah. Another well written, engaging piece, Barbara, I enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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I really hope this doesn't mean the end of Sami and Noah's relationship, I could really feel the hurt Sami could after seeing Noah. Another well written, engaging piece, Barbara, I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. Sami understood his answer.
Comment from Cindy Decker 3
Barbara,
I like the way you reveal Sami's jealousy; I remember feeling years ago. lol.
The tender scenes between Sami and Noah are very well done.
Will there be a Christmas chapter.
Great chapter, Barbara.
Blessings,
Cindy
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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Barbara,
I like the way you reveal Sami's jealousy; I remember feeling years ago. lol.
The tender scenes between Sami and Noah are very well done.
Will there be a Christmas chapter.
Great chapter, Barbara.
Blessings,
Cindy
Comment Written 09-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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No Christmas chapter. It's summer in the story. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This chapter was a long one and I agree the idea of condensing this would help me stay focused on the dialogue between Sami and Noah. This is engaging and entertaining and I followed along diligently as the text was long enough for me to lose track of who was saying what to whom. The romance is ongoing and full of surprises as it appeals to the reader's sense of decency.
Thank you for sharing the doubt that jealousy can bring to any relationship.
Jesse
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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This chapter was a long one and I agree the idea of condensing this would help me stay focused on the dialogue between Sami and Noah. This is engaging and entertaining and I followed along diligently as the text was long enough for me to lose track of who was saying what to whom. The romance is ongoing and full of surprises as it appeals to the reader's sense of decency.
Thank you for sharing the doubt that jealousy can bring to any relationship.
Jesse
Comment Written 09-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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Thank you for the kind review and understanding.
Comment from Lea Tonin1
GULP! I said damn! Look at that dessert up there! Stupid define specimen on my say! You are amazingly good at dialogue. Wow! I'm floored. I almost got jealous when he was kissing her! I haven't had the pleasure of reading your other chapter. So I felt my ass would like to do that. Congratulate you on your superior writing stuff.Obviously well versed. Thank you for this great submission. Hope you have a great night!
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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GULP! I said damn! Look at that dessert up there! Stupid define specimen on my say! You are amazingly good at dialogue. Wow! I'm floored. I almost got jealous when he was kissing her! I haven't had the pleasure of reading your other chapter. So I felt my ass would like to do that. Congratulate you on your superior writing stuff.Obviously well versed. Thank you for this great submission. Hope you have a great night!
Comment Written 09-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. I appreciate the encouragement. Yes, I prefer to move my story forward with dialogue.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Sami is good at snap judgements. Fortunately, Noah is good at getting her to listen to reason. Her hot Spanish blood may make his future very interesting. Noticed no error and enjoyed the story line.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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Sami is good at snap judgements. Fortunately, Noah is good at getting her to listen to reason. Her hot Spanish blood may make his future very interesting. Noticed no error and enjoyed the story line.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Wendy G
If Deloris' husband died four years ago, that is enough time for them to become more than just friends and sharing an embrace at the front door, with him half-dressed could very easily be misunderstood. But I am glad he situation was sorted quickly. Sami always jumps to conclusions quickly, and needs lots of reassurance. Let's hope she does trust him sufficiently from now on. Well written.
Wendy
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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If Deloris' husband died four years ago, that is enough time for them to become more than just friends and sharing an embrace at the front door, with him half-dressed could very easily be misunderstood. But I am glad he situation was sorted quickly. Sami always jumps to conclusions quickly, and needs lots of reassurance. Let's hope she does trust him sufficiently from now on. Well written.
Wendy
Comment Written 08-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from lyenochka
Thank you for not drawing out the misunderstanding over two postings! That would really bug me as a reader! Lol. I'm glad that Noah was able to explain things quickly and that Sami understood. Although I don't know how Noah could hear a knock while showering. I would think he could have put a shirt on before answering the door! I liked that Jasper could sense Noah coming - that shows how much they have bonded. Even the rest of the team bonded with Sami.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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Thank you for not drawing out the misunderstanding over two postings! That would really bug me as a reader! Lol. I'm glad that Noah was able to explain things quickly and that Sami understood. Although I don't know how Noah could hear a knock while showering. I would think he could have put a shirt on before answering the door! I liked that Jasper could sense Noah coming - that shows how much they have bonded. Even the rest of the team bonded with Sami.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. Good point about the knock on the door. I'll think about that.
Comment from lancellot
You are very talented. And your structural writing and editing are solid. You can weave a tale. I do think, because you use a now standard formula, that it may cause issues. Not FanStory issues, but outside.
notes:
"Sorry, can't do that. Boss lives only two blocks from Big T's territory. He'd be furious. We'll take you. How's that?"
-Wouldn't be easier, and more logical for to just take the phone and not her? And why does Sami (a civilian) need a wrist communicator, and just her cell phone?
"This isn't good," snapped Noah. He turned toward his apartment. "Sorry, Deloris. I need to repair the damage."
"Is she the young lady you were telling me about?" After he nodded, she added, "I'm sure once you explain, she'll understand."
-I'm not, not complaining. But this trope has been used too many times, including in your other books. The reader could easily see the set-up coming. You always have your female leads be strong women, so why the constant running away (like a child) and then later having the man explain/ apologize/ make sure she's okay?
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2024
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You are very talented. And your structural writing and editing are solid. You can weave a tale. I do think, because you use a now standard formula, that it may cause issues. Not FanStory issues, but outside.
notes:
"Sorry, can't do that. Boss lives only two blocks from Big T's territory. He'd be furious. We'll take you. How's that?"
-Wouldn't be easier, and more logical for to just take the phone and not her? And why does Sami (a civilian) need a wrist communicator, and just her cell phone?
"This isn't good," snapped Noah. He turned toward his apartment. "Sorry, Deloris. I need to repair the damage."
"Is she the young lady you were telling me about?" After he nodded, she added, "I'm sure once you explain, she'll understand."
-I'm not, not complaining. But this trope has been used too many times, including in your other books. The reader could easily see the set-up coming. You always have your female leads be strong women, so why the constant running away (like a child) and then later having the man explain/ apologize/ make sure she's okay?
Comment Written 08-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2024
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They knew Sami really wanted to see Noah. NO! to the cell phone because the bad guys could trace the teams calls to her. As for the other, Sami is still coming into her own. Thank you for the kind review.
