Dr. Howler's Nightmares
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Comment from beoralf
Telling a vampire story in first person is a novel twist. I find your king's name to be an unsettling distraction. And why would a shape shifter sit in prison? Putting a throne in the kings chambers is a sly way to imply egomania. Putting the bite on the king gives the vampire the kingdom while preserving a puppet for legitimacy is good strategy.
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reply by the author on 08-Aug-2015
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Telling a vampire story in first person is a novel twist. I find your king's name to be an unsettling distraction. And why would a shape shifter sit in prison? Putting a throne in the kings chambers is a sly way to imply egomania. Putting the bite on the king gives the vampire the kingdom while preserving a puppet for legitimacy is good strategy.
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Comment Written 08-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2015
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I figured many British members of this site may well find my using Wombat in a story such as this unsettling. And, that is okay. In my notes I clarified my feelings about him. I believe he will make a fine king for the British Empire one day. In this story he did not do such a remarkable job. However, it does remain only a Nightmare, nothing more or less. Pleased you enjoyed the tale.
Comment from ellie6
A creepy tale. King William deserved what he got, but won't he turn into a vampire now? It's bad enough having vampires and werewolves around, but a CRUEL vampire is surely a double whammy!
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2015
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A creepy tale. King William deserved what he got, but won't he turn into a vampire now? It's bad enough having vampires and werewolves around, but a CRUEL vampire is surely a double whammy!
Comment Written 08-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2015
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Oh yes he will, but he will belong to my harem and I CAN control him. Perhaps I will even allow him the blood of a nice juicy spider, if he proves he can be a very good little boy that is. So pleased you enjoyed my nightmare.
Comment from royowen
Well done, this would indeed be a nightmare if dear old England was devoured this way in a nightmare, but I enjoyed this story, the characters were ok, the imaginative way you connected with the story was good, the ending was a particularly gruesome one, with Prince William dying a most awful demise, well done, Enjoyable, blessings, Roy.
Spag : there I sat on his (thrown) Throne?
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2015
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Well done, this would indeed be a nightmare if dear old England was devoured this way in a nightmare, but I enjoyed this story, the characters were ok, the imaginative way you connected with the story was good, the ending was a particularly gruesome one, with Prince William dying a most awful demise, well done, Enjoyable, blessings, Roy.
Spag : there I sat on his (thrown) Throne?
Comment Written 08-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2015
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Thank you for catching that glaring error. You have earned one HOWL! for today. Pleased you enjoyed my little Nightmare.
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Most welcome Brett,
Comment from BeasPeas
Well, nice to meet you Dr. Howler. It seems this foul king got what he deserved. Power does go to one's head as 'absolute power DOES seem to corrupt absolutely.' Sometimes there is no other way. A 'bad' nightmare written in a 'good' way--flows well, good plot, fine imagery. Marilyn
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2015
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Well, nice to meet you Dr. Howler. It seems this foul king got what he deserved. Power does go to one's head as 'absolute power DOES seem to corrupt absolutely.' Sometimes there is no other way. A 'bad' nightmare written in a 'good' way--flows well, good plot, fine imagery. Marilyn
Comment Written 08-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2015
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Thank you very much. Here is to hoping you enjoy your Nightmares as much as I enjoy mine.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is certainly and entertaining read. It is technically sound and progresses in a clear and logical manner. I got a little confused in this section: He threw his scepter at me in fear. I caught it in mid-air and easily crushed it with one hand telling him, "William, you are powerless to stop me." - If you are a bat at this point in the story how do you have hands with which to catch the scepter?
Nicely done and I thank you very much for sharing it.
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This is certainly and entertaining read. It is technically sound and progresses in a clear and logical manner. I got a little confused in this section: He threw his scepter at me in fear. I caught it in mid-air and easily crushed it with one hand telling him, "William, you are powerless to stop me." - If you are a bat at this point in the story how do you have hands with which to catch the scepter?
Nicely done and I thank you very much for sharing it.
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Comment Written 08-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2015
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So pleased to hear you enjoyed my little Nightmare. To answer your question think "Dracula". He was not just a bat he was also in the form of a man.
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What confused me is the story line says he turned into the bat form and since it never mentioned he changed back I questioned his suddenly having hands. I completely understood the whole take on Dracula.
