Tick Tock
Contest entry.55 total reviews
Comment from RGstar
This is the second of the " lonely poems for the contest that I have reviewed, and I must say, I like the poetic aura and delivery of this piece. It would be right up Dean's street. Yet, I felt like the other, the theme of loneliness was not exploited to the full, it, for me, was more about revenge for an action, rather than somebody being lonely.if not for the theme entry, this may have gotten a six from me, but because of the loneliness tag, I did not really find loneliness here. Still, as said, very well written and presented with a nice aura surrounding the write.
A good stand alone.
A very well done.
Best wishes, good presentation.
RGstar
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2015
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This is the second of the " lonely poems for the contest that I have reviewed, and I must say, I like the poetic aura and delivery of this piece. It would be right up Dean's street. Yet, I felt like the other, the theme of loneliness was not exploited to the full, it, for me, was more about revenge for an action, rather than somebody being lonely.if not for the theme entry, this may have gotten a six from me, but because of the loneliness tag, I did not really find loneliness here. Still, as said, very well written and presented with a nice aura surrounding the write.
A good stand alone.
A very well done.
Best wishes, good presentation.
RGstar
Comment Written 11-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2015
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Thank you for the kind and generous encouragement. It is greatly appreciated.
Comment from Jackarrie
I enjoyed this horror entry, it is not gory or very frightening, but yet it does work it way nicely through the poem to the final end of life. The ticking clock drove him to take her life. I know in horror stories madness is always present, and I see it here.
Great presentation.
Good luck in the contest
Mary
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2015
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I enjoyed this horror entry, it is not gory or very frightening, but yet it does work it way nicely through the poem to the final end of life. The ticking clock drove him to take her life. I know in horror stories madness is always present, and I see it here.
Great presentation.
Good luck in the contest
Mary
Comment Written 11-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2015
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Thank you for the kind and generous encouragement. It is greatly appreciated.
Comment from Curly Girly
Whoa! This is a creepy, chilling poem. I can almost hear the ticking of that spooky clock. This has the look of a DK entry! If it is, best wishes and good luck. It is well written and will be a strong contender.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2015
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Whoa! This is a creepy, chilling poem. I can almost hear the ticking of that spooky clock. This has the look of a DK entry! If it is, best wishes and good luck. It is well written and will be a strong contender.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2015
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Thank you for the kind and generous encouragement. It is greatly appreciated.
Comment from artemis53
Well done especially that moment of hesitation. I'm a bit jaded when it comes to horror stories. Maybe it's because my line of business ;)
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2015
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Well done especially that moment of hesitation. I'm a bit jaded when it comes to horror stories. Maybe it's because my line of business ;)
Comment Written 10-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2015
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Thank you for the kind and generous encouragement. It is greatly appreciated.
Comment from Saikripa
The poem is well written and aptly displayed. The poem has beautifully shifted the onus of crime to the ticking clock and the horror is well projected by the timing and the ticking clock. Great job,
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The poem is well written and aptly displayed. The poem has beautifully shifted the onus of crime to the ticking clock and the horror is well projected by the timing and the ticking clock. Great job,
Comment Written 10-Aug-2015
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Thank you for the kind and generous encouragement. It is greatly appreciated.
Comment from happykat4
Horror, yes. I hope for his sake that she did cheat. If she did, still is not a reason to kill her. You will be suspect and end up in prison. The poem was fluid and the rhyme, good. I was hopeful that he would let it go, but no, and now her blood drips and drips. Good luck in the contest. Kat
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2015
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Horror, yes. I hope for his sake that she did cheat. If she did, still is not a reason to kill her. You will be suspect and end up in prison. The poem was fluid and the rhyme, good. I was hopeful that he would let it go, but no, and now her blood drips and drips. Good luck in the contest. Kat
Comment Written 10-Aug-2015
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Thank you for the kind and generous encouragement. It is greatly appreciated.
Comment from themundanegirl
This is a very wella nd poweffully written piece of work.
Great word choice.
Great picture choice.
The choice of color definitely sets the scene of horror.
I wish you the best of luck.
Thanks for sharing.
Keep writing.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2015
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This is a very wella nd poweffully written piece of work.
Great word choice.
Great picture choice.
The choice of color definitely sets the scene of horror.
I wish you the best of luck.
Thanks for sharing.
Keep writing.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2015
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Thank you for the kind and generous encouragement. It is greatly appreciated.
Comment from Gloria ....
Very smartly written horror story in a poem, author. You've got all the elements, plot, conflict, setting, characters and resolution and most importantly you got to blame the dastardly deed on that infernal clock. That is a stroke of midnight brilliance.
Excellent presentation and poem. Best wishes to you in the contest.
Gloria
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2015
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Very smartly written horror story in a poem, author. You've got all the elements, plot, conflict, setting, characters and resolution and most importantly you got to blame the dastardly deed on that infernal clock. That is a stroke of midnight brilliance.
Excellent presentation and poem. Best wishes to you in the contest.
Gloria
Comment Written 10-Aug-2015
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Thank you for the kind and generous encouragement. It is greatly appreciated.
Comment from Megalips
Got a real strong flavor of Edgar A Poe, in particular the Tell-Tale Heart. I like the reference to the Raven speaking in his ear, the suggestion of psychosis and delusion as driving factors to commit murder. The first person works great here. Well done and good luck!
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Got a real strong flavor of Edgar A Poe, in particular the Tell-Tale Heart. I like the reference to the Raven speaking in his ear, the suggestion of psychosis and delusion as driving factors to commit murder. The first person works great here. Well done and good luck!
Comment Written 10-Aug-2015
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Thank you very much for th ekind and generous encouragement. It is truly appreciated.
Comment from beoralf
Well structured. Psycho horror isn't my cup but I was drawn along to learn what's going to happen next. Your protagonist even pauses to reconsider. Well crafted story with rhythm and rhyming to boot. It ain't a nice story but it's good.
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Well structured. Psycho horror isn't my cup but I was drawn along to learn what's going to happen next. Your protagonist even pauses to reconsider. Well crafted story with rhythm and rhyming to boot. It ain't a nice story but it's good.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2015
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Thank you very much for th ekind and generous encouragement. It is truly appreciated.
