BOOK OF RENGA POEMS
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Leaves Lose Fight"Renga is a collective poets Japanese poem
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Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
Sandra,
I don't know what a Renga is, but this poem is solid. It flows nicely from beginning to end. Those three lines tell a story to the end.
Well done my friend
Cecilia
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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Sandra,
I don't know what a Renga is, but this poem is solid. It flows nicely from beginning to end. Those three lines tell a story to the end.
Well done my friend
Cecilia
Comment Written 02-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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No, I didn't either until I read Gypsy's and her author's notes. I promised to give it a go, so hope it's right. I'm glad you liked it. Thanks my friend. Sandra xx
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You're welcome
Cecilia
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
The combination of wind and loose leaves creates the traditional Autumnal fall and your poem said it all in so few words Sandra and I enjoyed the scene you painted here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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The combination of wind and loose leaves creates the traditional Autumnal fall and your poem said it all in so few words Sandra and I enjoyed the scene you painted here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 02-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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Thank you, Dolly. I'm not a short poem writer, so this was a bit of a change for me. I'm glad you liked it. Thanks, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and presentation, Sandra.
-A well written poem with a good topic.
-You did it correctly because Gypsy had the 7-7 line.
-Effective nature and seasonal imagery describes
the intensity of the winter wind.
-A very good satori line.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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-Nice artwork and presentation, Sandra.
-A well written poem with a good topic.
-You did it correctly because Gypsy had the 7-7 line.
-Effective nature and seasonal imagery describes
the intensity of the winter wind.
-A very good satori line.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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Aw thank you, Pam! I had no idea what I was doing really. I promised Gypsy I'd give it a try and this is the result. I'm so glad you like it. Thanks, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
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You are very welcome, Sandra, and you did a great job!
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Sandra,
This poem gives a good description of what is happening in the artwork.
It follows the syllable count. I have to see what poems it is linked to.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a great holiday season.
Joan
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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Hi Sandra,
This poem gives a good description of what is happening in the artwork.
It follows the syllable count. I have to see what poems it is linked to.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a great holiday season.
Joan
Comment Written 02-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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Hi Joan, yes check the rest out and join in. I'm glad you thought mine was okay. I'm not used to these little ones. Warmest hugs, my friend. Sandra xx
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You're welcome, Sandra.
Joan
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
I see you fixed it. it is still very good, and the picture is lovely. Now, I got to add my couplet. when someone else adds a 5-7-5 then you can add your seven seven couplet.
Karen
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I see you fixed it. it is still very good, and the picture is lovely. Now, I got to add my couplet. when someone else adds a 5-7-5 then you can add your seven seven couplet.
Karen
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Comment Written 02-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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Thank you, Karen. Yes, I had it as a 7-5-7 at first!!! What a wally! Lol. I will need to keep practicing. I'll watch out for the next 5-7-5 and see if I can do the couplet. I'll check yours out. Thanks, my friend. Warmest hugs, Sandra xx
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it was harder than I thought at first, but I got the hang of it.
you will too. Karen
Comment from Tim Margetts
Well as you haven't said what form you are going for, how can it be wrong? :)
The poem is a well crafted 7-5-7 in the Japanese style of embracing nature.
A haiku for example would typically be 5-7-5 but there is no strictly set syllabic count as long as it is uniform and ideally contains a big concept in a small neat space.
Thank you for sharing this excellent view of a winter wind.
Tim x
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Well as you haven't said what form you are going for, how can it be wrong? :)
The poem is a well crafted 7-5-7 in the Japanese style of embracing nature.
A haiku for example would typically be 5-7-5 but there is no strictly set syllabic count as long as it is uniform and ideally contains a big concept in a small neat space.
Thank you for sharing this excellent view of a winter wind.
Tim x
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Comment Written 02-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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Hi Tim, it is a Renga poem. It says it at the top and is a multi-author poem, where the 5-7-5 is followed by a 7 syllable couplet which is written my the next poet. There can be up to a 100 stanzas, so if you want to join in, click on the add a chapter underneath. Reading your review, I saw I'd done it wrong!! It is now a 5-7-5! Lol. Thanks Tim. Sandra xxx
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Yeah, I missed the Renga bit as I am blind and dappy as a fruit bat.
I realised when i saw Karen's verse a few minutes later LOL
Tim x
