Tick Tock
Contest entry.55 total reviews
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Wow, mystery horror story writer, I think I'm going to go smash all the clocks in my house so the husband doesn't hear them. Wait, we're okay, we have the battery operated type. I'm good...or at least I hope I am...
Great story, whoever you are. You a very scary writer, I mean you write very scary stories. Good luck in the contest. It's sure to be a winner!
Rhonda
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2015
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Wow, mystery horror story writer, I think I'm going to go smash all the clocks in my house so the husband doesn't hear them. Wait, we're okay, we have the battery operated type. I'm good...or at least I hope I am...
Great story, whoever you are. You a very scary writer, I mean you write very scary stories. Good luck in the contest. It's sure to be a winner!
Rhonda
Comment Written 09-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2015
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Thank you for the kind and generous encouragement. It is greatly appreciated and will make me a winner even if it does not earn a ribbon.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Tick Tack~ Congratulations Mystic Angel, you deserve to win the contest, beautiful piece.
Hello anonymous,
I like your creepy poem about jealous and despair. The husband is going crazy and keeps hearing a tick tack sound in his head. Awesome art work!
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2015
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Tick Tack~ Congratulations Mystic Angel, you deserve to win the contest, beautiful piece.
Hello anonymous,
I like your creepy poem about jealous and despair. The husband is going crazy and keeps hearing a tick tack sound in his head. Awesome art work!
Comment Written 09-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2015
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Thank you.
Comment from mermaids
Your words create an eerie feeling and you surprise the reader with deciding not to stab the wife but changing his mind. The moon is shining brightly on her face sets the scene and gives a clear view of what is taking place. You have vivid descriptive words and create a scene of horror. Best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2015
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Your words create an eerie feeling and you surprise the reader with deciding not to stab the wife but changing his mind. The moon is shining brightly on her face sets the scene and gives a clear view of what is taking place. You have vivid descriptive words and create a scene of horror. Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2015
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Thank you! I appreciate your kind and generous feedback very much.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Well, the contest moderator did say to have fun with this one, and I certainly had lots of fun reading your entry, lol.
The rhyming, rhythm and flow is superbly well composed, and the presentation alone is frightening. The story is a good one, and is well conveyed.
I think you've got yourself a top contender here.
Good luck, Monica! ~Dean :)
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2015
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Well, the contest moderator did say to have fun with this one, and I certainly had lots of fun reading your entry, lol.
The rhyming, rhythm and flow is superbly well composed, and the presentation alone is frightening. The story is a good one, and is well conveyed.
I think you've got yourself a top contender here.
Good luck, Monica! ~Dean :)
Comment Written 09-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2015
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I doubt that since you have not entered yet, but thanks for the encouragement. I truly appreciate it.
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I'm not entering this one. After three consecutive losses, I've no more money left with which to promote. So, I'll be sitting this one out.
Good luck.~Dean ;)
Comment from Dawn Munro
Wow! This is a terrific horror-story- in- a poem - VERY entertaining, and the poetry itself is great - flawless meter and rhyme. I 'get' that tick-tock invasion, too - I'm one of those people who doesn't like background noise when I'm trying to focus (as in, writing something, for example) - LOL. Yup, it can drive one crazy...(yikes). *grin*
Best of luck in the contest. (Fabulous presentation too - loved the video AND artwork.)
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2015
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Wow! This is a terrific horror-story- in- a poem - VERY entertaining, and the poetry itself is great - flawless meter and rhyme. I 'get' that tick-tock invasion, too - I'm one of those people who doesn't like background noise when I'm trying to focus (as in, writing something, for example) - LOL. Yup, it can drive one crazy...(yikes). *grin*
Best of luck in the contest. (Fabulous presentation too - loved the video AND artwork.)
Comment Written 09-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2015
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Thank you for the kind and generous words of encouragement. They are greatly appreciated.
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Hey, I loved it - my pleasure!
Comment from Domino 2
Hi, Monica.
An excellent double sonnet here in top meter and rhyme, plus a dark and entertaining story of jealousy and revenge.
Clever use of time to denote the ticking time-bomb of suspicion and ultimate release and murder, coupled with the evil 'sacrifice' theme that maybe 'sacrifices' the murderer's soul - though I don't believe in such rubbish! :-)
Cheers, Ray xx
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2015
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Hi, Monica.
An excellent double sonnet here in top meter and rhyme, plus a dark and entertaining story of jealousy and revenge.
Clever use of time to denote the ticking time-bomb of suspicion and ultimate release and murder, coupled with the evil 'sacrifice' theme that maybe 'sacrifices' the murderer's soul - though I don't believe in such rubbish! :-)
Cheers, Ray xx
Comment Written 09-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2015
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WOW!!!! Thank you VERY much. I keep trying to do something worthy in the horror genre and your wonderful encouragement tells me I might be at least close this time. I really appreciate the feedback, Ray, as you are one of the few left who really have a handle on meter now that Brooke is absent. HUGS for making the sun shine her much brighter by your kindness.
Comment from visionary1234
Oh bravo DK! No one can even come CLOSE to this one - and the meter is perfect, too ... what else can I say? A perfectly HORRIBLE poem dear!
:)Sharyn
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Oh bravo DK! No one can even come CLOSE to this one - and the meter is perfect, too ... what else can I say? A perfectly HORRIBLE poem dear!
:)Sharyn
Comment Written 09-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2015
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Thank you for the kind and generous encouragement. It is greatly appreciated.
Comment from Diny
reminds me of the cadence and tone of evermore --- VERY excellantly crafted poetic venture .
I am at work so couldn't see the author notes section so many things either video or attavments are unviewable and blocked here- But glad I could sneak a peek at your poem
Write on-
Diny
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2015
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reminds me of the cadence and tone of evermore --- VERY excellantly crafted poetic venture .
I am at work so couldn't see the author notes section so many things either video or attavments are unviewable and blocked here- But glad I could sneak a peek at your poem
Write on-
Diny
Comment Written 09-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2015
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WOW!!!! Thank you VERY much for such kind and generous encouragement. I am thrilled you enjoyed this as horror is not really my thing so I had to push myself to write this. I truly appreciate your feedback as it has made the effort worthwhile.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Nothing drives me crazier than listening to the constant "tick tock" of a clock! Gets on the nerves like not much else possibly can. Of course this is a well written Horror poem. The constant ticking of the clock kind of reminds me of the famous swinging of the pendulum in Tell Tale Heart by my most favorite author of all, Edgar Allen Poe.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2015
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Nothing drives me crazier than listening to the constant "tick tock" of a clock! Gets on the nerves like not much else possibly can. Of course this is a well written Horror poem. The constant ticking of the clock kind of reminds me of the famous swinging of the pendulum in Tell Tale Heart by my most favorite author of all, Edgar Allen Poe.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2015
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Thank you very much! Poe is one of my favorites as well. I am happy you thought this a decent entry and grateful for your kind encouragement and support.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
I can't possibly guess who wrote this. He-he-he. This is great. First he was going to, then not, then he does. Sounds like life to me. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
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I can't possibly guess who wrote this. He-he-he. This is great. First he was going to, then not, then he does. Sounds like life to me. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 09-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2015
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Thank you for the kind encouragement. It is greatly appreciated.
