Comment from Pamusart

Excellent

Hi Mark

Hmmm is she oblivious to your looks because she is staring into space or because she already saw you and it's not interested

Either way it hurts. I know it hurts.

Great job. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2025

Comment from Claire Tennant

Excellent

This is an imagination spinner. It is a realistic portrayal in a lot of cases. I love the picture you chose; it speaks volumes. The rhythm and the choice of words tell a beautiful, if not a sad, story. I wish you well in the contest.

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2025

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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2025

Claire,

Thank you for your interpretation for this poem. Since I use FanArt illustrations for almost all my posts, I can take only a small credit for the images of my overall presentation that entertained you.

I write mostly 5-7-5 syllabled lines. Longer ones are not in my poetry wheelhouse.

Mark

Comment from Marilyn Hamilton

Excellent

Mark, you paint a compelling picture with your words and leave us with a feeling of lonliness and isolation. Nice artwork to add to your presentation. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2025

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reply by the author on 20-Jan-2025

Thanks Marilyn for your support for this post. Your read is accurate.

Mark

Comment from tempeste

Exceptional

I love this moment in time..

She is unaware of being the interest of another in the room ..

Will he find the courage to make his move and introduce himself

will she brush him off or reward him a smile and start talking

I just love imagining all the possible outcomes.

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2025

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reply by the author on 20-Jan-2025

Thanks,

Pleased with your response to this post.

Mark

Comment from June Sargent

Excellent

That's so sad! Oblivious to his stolen glances. You've successfully captured the bittersweet feeling of love from a distance. Maybe he should make a move?

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2025

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reply by the author on 20-Jan-2025

June,

I like your idea about the next move (-;

Mark

Comment from karenina

Excellent

Nice Senryu! You leave it up to the reader to wonder where her mind is...
That image gives us many options. Is she bored? Day dreaming? Sad?
I'm captivated wondering... Mysterious! You've caught my attention with this one!

Karenina

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2025

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reply by the author on 20-Jan-2025

Thanks Karenina!

I found my choices were limited on my go to FanArt selection. So, I chose one with a woman who appears bored with her situation. No wonder the guy had no chance.

Mark

reply by karenina on 20-Jan-2025

Hmm. Thanks for the insight! (Appearing bored could be a ruse)

Smile....

Comment from RodG

Excellent

Mark, I like how you draw the reader into both the artwork and your poem. We feel the unrequited love the Speaker has for this young lady who is totally unaware of him. Nicely drawn with only seventeen syllables. Rod

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2025

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reply by the author on 20-Jan-2025

Thank Rod for your read on this poem. The guy may not have a chance with this woman (-(

Mark

reply by RodG on 20-Jan-2025

My pleasure.

Comment from jmdg1954

Excellent

Yup, story of my life, looking at a girl and they do not look back at ya! Or look right through me.

Good poem entry. I enjoyed reading this.

Cheers my friend...
John

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2025

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reply by the author on 20-Jan-2025

Thanks John for your review. Try not staring at them ! LOL

Mark