Solitude
Reflecting on times when I stood all alone5 total reviews
Comment from SimianSavant
This conforms to the contest format, and it's a worthy thought for a 5-7-5. I think you could do a little more to contain the ideas within the line wrap. It is not very eloquent to end the first line on "THE" and the piece just feels like a single 17-syllable line, rather than a 5-7-5.
Solitude is found /
When I find the strength within /
to forgive myself
It's not as pithy as your version, but maybe you can find a way to make yours fit the line schematic more cohesively. Anyway, your material is good, and thanks for the read.
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reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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This conforms to the contest format, and it's a worthy thought for a 5-7-5. I think you could do a little more to contain the ideas within the line wrap. It is not very eloquent to end the first line on "THE" and the piece just feels like a single 17-syllable line, rather than a 5-7-5.
Solitude is found /
When I find the strength within /
to forgive myself
It's not as pithy as your version, but maybe you can find a way to make yours fit the line schematic more cohesively. Anyway, your material is good, and thanks for the read.
🦍
Comment Written 09-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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Thank you for your reply. This is why I post material to be reviewed. Thank you for the suggestion and look forward for more replies from you in the future. Shadrach
Comment from Trina Layne
Epic! This is an interesting definition of solitude. I wish you the best of luck with your entry. Congrats on what you have created. Thanks for sharing this gem.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2024
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Epic! This is an interesting definition of solitude. I wish you the best of luck with your entry. Congrats on what you have created. Thanks for sharing this gem.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2024
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Thank you for your reply. Still somewhat new to the website and figuring out all that it haves to offer. I'll check out some of work soon. Thanks again. Shadrach
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Cool things, Shadrach. I'm new here too. I'm only a few days old.
Comment from Peter Jarvis
This haiku beautifully captures the essence of finding peace within oneself through solitude. The journey towards self-forgiveness is profound and deeply personal, and your poem eloquently conveys this sentiment in just a few words.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2024
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This haiku beautifully captures the essence of finding peace within oneself through solitude. The journey towards self-forgiveness is profound and deeply personal, and your poem eloquently conveys this sentiment in just a few words.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2024
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Thank you for your reply. Trying different things on this website, still somewhat new. Have sometime on my hands to explore all the options that it has to offer. Thanks again. Shadrach
Comment from karenina
One of my favorite poems:
Desiderata-- by Max Ehrman, contains a line that came to mind as I read your 5-7-5.
"Go placidly amid the noise and the haste, and remember what peace there may be in silence."
When we set sway from the clamor of everyday life we are able to connect to our innermost intentions...
As we would forgive others, we must also learn to forgive ourselves!
When we do this? We are showing God's child we are understand grace!
Karenina
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2024
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One of my favorite poems:
Desiderata-- by Max Ehrman, contains a line that came to mind as I read your 5-7-5.
"Go placidly amid the noise and the haste, and remember what peace there may be in silence."
When we set sway from the clamor of everyday life we are able to connect to our innermost intentions...
As we would forgive others, we must also learn to forgive ourselves!
When we do this? We are showing God's child we are understand grace!
Karenina
Comment Written 08-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2024
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Congrats on the poem of month. I'm always grateful for your words, they inspire thoughts of remembering all that as passed. I walk further every morning, with my lord that guides me along this path.
May we always share our love of words, our romance to speak beautifully with all that we see through the eyes that our lord as given us.
Have a blessed day my friend, knowing you walk with me today.
Shadrach
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Thank you! I hope to see you on that nomination list soon! I am, indeed, walking spiritually with you on life's journey...
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
This is well written. The depth of this thought for me shares what it is like to find inner peace. It's a powerful reminder of the importance of healing. Very nicely done.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2024
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This is well written. The depth of this thought for me shares what it is like to find inner peace. It's a powerful reminder of the importance of healing. Very nicely done.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2024
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Thank you for your kind words. Figuring out more each day on this website. More importantly, figuring out life as by lord guides me along this journey. Eternal peace to graciously accept all I see. Thanks again for your reply. Shadrach
