The Kirby Case - Part 1
A detective attempts to find a serial killer32 total reviews
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
This is interesting. This is a new approach. I have written short crime pieces as poems, but never a big one. I will see how you get along. A clever idea. I would suggest you put breaks every six lines. Karen
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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This is interesting. This is a new approach. I have written short crime pieces as poems, but never a big one. I will see how you get along. A clever idea. I would suggest you put breaks every six lines. Karen
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Hhhhh
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Pam,
It sounds like they have the man's name, Mike Brady. How did they get that without DNA. If they were raped, how is there no semen for DNA. You never hear of a rapist wearing a condom to keep the semen from staining things.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a good day.
Joan
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Hi Pam,
It sounds like they have the man's name, Mike Brady. How did they get that without DNA. If they were raped, how is there no semen for DNA. You never hear of a rapist wearing a condom to keep the semen from staining things.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a good day.
Joan
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Thank you, jon for a wonderful review
Comment from jake cosmos aller
I love this straight forward narrative poem written in down to earth vocabulary and easy to follow formatting about the hunt for a serial killer. when you finish it, you could turn it into a flash fiction piece as well.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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I love this straight forward narrative poem written in down to earth vocabulary and easy to follow formatting about the hunt for a serial killer. when you finish it, you could turn it into a flash fiction piece as well.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Thank you, Jake for another great review
Comment from Michele Harber
What an excellent start to what I'm happy to see is a series. It's hard enough to write a successful mystery story, but to do so in rhyme and meter is much, much more difficult. Not surprisingly, you've figured out the trick.
You beautifully laid out character and plot without missing a beat--literally. I'm anxious to read the other chapter you've written, which I'll do now.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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What an excellent start to what I'm happy to see is a series. It's hard enough to write a successful mystery story, but to do so in rhyme and meter is much, much more difficult. Not surprisingly, you've figured out the trick.
You beautifully laid out character and plot without missing a beat--literally. I'm anxious to read the other chapter you've written, which I'll do now.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Thank you for this encouraging review
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You're very welcome--and very talented!
Comment from Tim Margetts
Well now, Pam.
A crime and detective tale in a poetic form. This is a new one on me, but I must say you have me hooked with Part 1.
Is the man in the picture the lead detective?
Also, is this a work of fiction or based on a real case?
Tim x
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Well now, Pam.
A crime and detective tale in a poetic form. This is a new one on me, but I must say you have me hooked with Part 1.
Is the man in the picture the lead detective?
Also, is this a work of fiction or based on a real case?
Tim x
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Hi Tim. This is a work of fiction not based on any real case and the man in the photo is how I envisioned the lead detective would look. Thanks for a great review.
Comment from Begin Again
Genius! You, the author, of course.... I can't believe that you have taken a mystery-crime story and made it into a poem that rhymes and I can actually understand. A lot of poems go over my head...but this is fabulous. Off to read the next one...
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Genius! You, the author, of course.... I can't believe that you have taken a mystery-crime story and made it into a poem that rhymes and I can actually understand. A lot of poems go over my head...but this is fabulous. Off to read the next one...
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Thank you, Carol for your encouragement and for a great review
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
Pam,
This is a great poem. It's sad at the same time. It is hard for detectives to solve a case without DNA. The killer is smart that way and a disgusting human being at the same time.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Pam,
This is a great poem. It's sad at the same time. It is hard for detectives to solve a case without DNA. The killer is smart that way and a disgusting human being at the same time.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Thank you, Cecilia for reviewing so many chapters in my poem. I really appreciate it.
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You're welcome
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
They were raped but no semen stains? I don't know that I've ever heard of a rapist taking such care.
So he plants a (painted) kiss on their chest; the kiss of death?
Pam, I'm intrigued, even though the subject matter is gruesome. I've not seen a series of poem that tell a story before, and I'm looking forward to reading the next seven.
I assume this is true? I could just Google the Kirby case, but could you post a couple of suggested websites where we could go to get more information. I assume you've used a few to research your poems.
Thanks,
Pam
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They were raped but no semen stains? I don't know that I've ever heard of a rapist taking such care.
So he plants a (painted) kiss on their chest; the kiss of death?
Pam, I'm intrigued, even though the subject matter is gruesome. I've not seen a series of poem that tell a story before, and I'm looking forward to reading the next seven.
I assume this is true? I could just Google the Kirby case, but could you post a couple of suggested websites where we could go to get more information. I assume you've used a few to research your poems.
Thanks,
Pam
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
Comment from DonandVicki
I just read part two first, I'm glad that I got part one so I am all caught up with your poetic crime thriller. You could very well be onto something new, a new genre. don
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I just read part two first, I'm glad that I got part one so I am all caught up with your poetic crime thriller. You could very well be onto something new, a new genre. don
Comment Written 07-Jan-2025
Comment from Lea Tonin1
Wow! Holy smokes eh?! I'm canadian, but I do remember hearing something about it. Some are just dark, dark, dark and evil.I swear
Such a sister yet beautifully written piece. I see you have a part two I shall go to read that as well. Immediately engaging your poem is. The matter of fact, way that you wrote it, it is brilliant.
Thank you for this very stirring, and yet impactful poem. Thank you for your submission. I wish you only the best.Have a great evening!
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Wow! Holy smokes eh?! I'm canadian, but I do remember hearing something about it. Some are just dark, dark, dark and evil.I swear
Such a sister yet beautifully written piece. I see you have a part two I shall go to read that as well. Immediately engaging your poem is. The matter of fact, way that you wrote it, it is brilliant.
Thank you for this very stirring, and yet impactful poem. Thank you for your submission. I wish you only the best.Have a great evening!
Comment Written 07-Jan-2025
