The Kirby Case - Part 2
A detective attempts to catch a serial killer28 total reviews
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
It is hard to read without any breaks. It gives me a headache. The story moves along. But, I also must say, the picture does not draw us in. It kinds puts me off. Go to Pinterest they have pictures of everything. Karen
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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It is hard to read without any breaks. It gives me a headache. The story moves along. But, I also must say, the picture does not draw us in. It kinds puts me off. Go to Pinterest they have pictures of everything. Karen
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Hhhhh
Comment from Barry Penfold
Nice flow to this poem and the story is compelling. Hope they find the killer soon. Thanks for keeping this going so quickly. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Nice flow to this poem and the story is compelling. Hope they find the killer soon. Thanks for keeping this going so quickly. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Thank you, Barry for a great review
Comment from jake cosmos aller
loving this. two suggestions. Substack is a free microblog site. You can cut and paste a document into a blog posting. Almost idiot proof. You can then upload your email contacts into Substack and your work will go out to everyone on your list. All for free. You can if you convert the document to an MP3 format using zamzar post an audio version or do a podcast. how cool is that? I would put this all together in one document as an epic poem or re-write it as aprose poem flash piece and then post it on Substack let me know if you need any help setting that up. It is idiot proof you can search for me on the site under my name jake Cosmos Aller or under the name the world according to cosmos which is my word press blog.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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loving this. two suggestions. Substack is a free microblog site. You can cut and paste a document into a blog posting. Almost idiot proof. You can then upload your email contacts into Substack and your work will go out to everyone on your list. All for free. You can if you convert the document to an MP3 format using zamzar post an audio version or do a podcast. how cool is that? I would put this all together in one document as an epic poem or re-write it as aprose poem flash piece and then post it on Substack let me know if you need any help setting that up. It is idiot proof you can search for me on the site under my name jake Cosmos Aller or under the name the world according to cosmos which is my word press blog.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Thank you, Jake for your suggestions. I think they are above my intelligence level.
Thank you also for the wonderful review
Comment from Michele Harber
You've obviously done your share of reading and watching murder mysteries. You have that "the facts, nothing but the facts" tone, which works perfectly for the story you're telling. I can easily see this turned into a film noir. All it's missing is a femme fatale.
I appreciate that you revealed a few clues in this chapter, and didn't make the reader beg for crumbs. I'm looking forward to seeing what happens next.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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You've obviously done your share of reading and watching murder mysteries. You have that "the facts, nothing but the facts" tone, which works perfectly for the story you're telling. I can easily see this turned into a film noir. All it's missing is a femme fatale.
I appreciate that you revealed a few clues in this chapter, and didn't make the reader beg for crumbs. I'm looking forward to seeing what happens next.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Hi Michele. The only femme fatales are the victims. I have received so many suggestions on this it makes my head spin, but I always appreciate suggestions from you.
Thanks for the wonderful review
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Thanks, Pam, and I was only being facetious. I was suggesting that all that kept this from being a film noir was the femme fatale. Since you weren't actually writing a film noir, though, you didn't need it. 😀
Comment from Tim Margetts
Well, I am well and truly hooked on this tale, Pam.
Your rhyming and flow of the poetry are very good and the story is gripping.
And now we have some clues...
Tim x
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Well, I am well and truly hooked on this tale, Pam.
Your rhyming and flow of the poetry are very good and the story is gripping.
And now we have some clues...
Tim x
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Thank you again for a great review
Comment from Begin Again
Delivering the clues in rhyming fashion and keeping every thing straight, Just awesome, I say! And of course, this is my genre so I am enjoying every line you give me...It's great!
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Delivering the clues in rhyming fashion and keeping every thing straight, Just awesome, I say! And of course, this is my genre so I am enjoying every line you give me...It's great!
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Thank you again Carol for a great review
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
Pam,
This is another great addition to the ongoing investigation. That type of work is like solving a puzzle. I hope they catch the sicko who did this.
Well done my friend
Cecilia
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Pam,
This is another great addition to the ongoing investigation. That type of work is like solving a puzzle. I hope they catch the sicko who did this.
Well done my friend
Cecilia
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Thank you, Cecilia for another great review
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You're welcome. Keep them coming
Comment from nomi338
Check for male hairdressers or perhaps female impersonators working or just hanging out in hair salons. Maybe even persons hanging out near hair salons. This person may be getting a little too comfortable, maybe even a little sloppy.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Check for male hairdressers or perhaps female impersonators working or just hanging out in hair salons. Maybe even persons hanging out near hair salons. This person may be getting a little too comfortable, maybe even a little sloppy.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Thank you for your humorous suggestions on female impersonators and for a great review
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Pam, you're giving us all the clues and steps the police are taking in order to solve this case in a rhyming way; that can't be easy. Or, perhaps it is for you.
It looks like "chapter 3" is sitting in my inbox, so I will read that next. xo
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Pam, you're giving us all the clues and steps the police are taking in order to solve this case in a rhyming way; that can't be easy. Or, perhaps it is for you.
It looks like "chapter 3" is sitting in my inbox, so I will read that next. xo
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
Comment from ESOSTINE
You have written a master piece on detectives and serial killers. I am glad the way the poem ends as every crime must someday be revealed irrespective of the smartness of the criminals. Well done, dear Pamusart.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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You have written a master piece on detectives and serial killers. I am glad the way the poem ends as every crime must someday be revealed irrespective of the smartness of the criminals. Well done, dear Pamusart.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Thank you for your compliment and for your wonderful review
