The Kirby Case - Part 3
A homicide detective tries to catch a serial killer26 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Oh my goodness, these are pretty young girls who take care of themselves. Is this serial killer still on the loose? I noticed you are writing many poems about this case Pam, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Oh my goodness, these are pretty young girls who take care of themselves. Is this serial killer still on the loose? I noticed you are writing many poems about this case Pam, love Dolly x
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Hi, Dolly, this is fictional. I will specify that in my future chapter.
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A fascinating series Pam, I hope the killer is caught soon x x x
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
This poem is much better, but I cannot give a six as there is no spacing making it difficult to read. The writing is , or should be 80% of the grade. Then picture, font type, font color, font size, writing structure and grammer, and matting make up the other twenty percent. Karen
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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This poem is much better, but I cannot give a six as there is no spacing making it difficult to read. The writing is , or should be 80% of the grade. Then picture, font type, font color, font size, writing structure and grammer, and matting make up the other twenty percent. Karen
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Comment from Barry Penfold
This is getting pretty exciting. Yes, cameras are wonderful in detecting criminals. Detective Brady is pretty smart I think. Will he get there.? Thanks for sharing. I will go to the next instalment.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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This is getting pretty exciting. Yes, cameras are wonderful in detecting criminals. Detective Brady is pretty smart I think. Will he get there.? Thanks for sharing. I will go to the next instalment.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Thank you Barry for a wonderful review
Comment from jake cosmos aller
another part of the saga. well done narrative, in a blank verse format. i asked earlier if this was based on a true case or not. if so, would be nice to see author's notes about the original case
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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another part of the saga. well done narrative, in a blank verse format. i asked earlier if this was based on a true case or not. if so, would be nice to see author's notes about the original case
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Thank you, Jake for a great review
Comment from Charles D Ezell
Getting closer, now we wait for the results and take another step toward the shoe clue. I like this mystery poem, not many here on the site can do this. Keep it going.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Getting closer, now we wait for the results and take another step toward the shoe clue. I like this mystery poem, not many here on the site can do this. Keep it going.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Thank you, Charles for a wonderful review.
Comment from Michele Harber
You really could write a crime series for television. Your knowledge of evidence and how it's dealt with seems well researched and very logical. If I ever become a victim of crime, I think I might call you before I call the police.
Your story is coming along at a very enjoyable pace, quick enough to not let the reader get bored, but slow enough to not reveal too much too soon. Again, the fact that you're doing this in excellent rhyme and meter is amazing!
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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You really could write a crime series for television. Your knowledge of evidence and how it's dealt with seems well researched and very logical. If I ever become a victim of crime, I think I might call you before I call the police.
Your story is coming along at a very enjoyable pace, quick enough to not let the reader get bored, but slow enough to not reveal too much too soon. Again, the fact that you're doing this in excellent rhyme and meter is amazing!
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Thank you for the compliments and for this wonderful review.
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You're welcome. You know I call 'em as I see 'em, so the compliments were genuinely deserved!
Comment from kahpot
I love the way your story/poem gives us all the information we need to know about the progress of the case, and how things back at this time would have taken so much longer than now, very well written****kahpot
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I love the way your story/poem gives us all the information we need to know about the progress of the case, and how things back at this time would have taken so much longer than now, very well written****kahpot
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Thank you for your wonderful review
Comment from DonandVicki
I have been following your poetic serial killer story. A very original and engaging story in poem form. I have enjoyed this and look forward to reading much more.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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I have been following your poetic serial killer story. A very original and engaging story in poem form. I have enjoyed this and look forward to reading much more.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Thank you so much for your encouraging and wonderful review
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Sorry, I missed your note before about there being no high tech cameras at the time. This investigation is certainly coming up with some excellent clues about the victims and the perpetrator. Horrific as it is, it's still fascinating piecing the evidence together. You do a great job here, Pam, conveying this story. Well done! Debbie
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Sorry, I missed your note before about there being no high tech cameras at the time. This investigation is certainly coming up with some excellent clues about the victims and the perpetrator. Horrific as it is, it's still fascinating piecing the evidence together. You do a great job here, Pam, conveying this story. Well done! Debbie
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Thank you, Debbie for your thoughtful and wonderful review
Comment from Shanbreen
Hi Pam.
I believe this is the first one I have read that reads like a prose poem. It is well written.
For a while I was wondering where the shoe saga from Chen :
...distinctive pattern made by Chen.
would come into play.
It did some lines later:
...for shoes by Chen on showroom floors.
Well done, Pam. I am glad you are back into writing your poems.
I noticed that you are using a much larger font with double space between lines. You did it in the last one I reviewed, too. Any reason?
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Hi Pam.
I believe this is the first one I have read that reads like a prose poem. It is well written.
For a while I was wondering where the shoe saga from Chen :
...distinctive pattern made by Chen.
would come into play.
It did some lines later:
...for shoes by Chen on showroom floors.
Well done, Pam. I am glad you are back into writing your poems.
I noticed that you are using a much larger font with double space between lines. You did it in the last one I reviewed, too. Any reason?
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
