The Richest Poor Kid on my Block
A poor boy with three jobs at 10.15 total reviews
Comment from zanya
What an enjoyable read and told with such rich storytelling skills -the reader is not likely to get bored or want to skip over paragraphs here -and the comparison of a child's life today is interesting
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What an enjoyable read and told with such rich storytelling skills -the reader is not likely to get bored or want to skip over paragraphs here -and the comparison of a child's life today is interesting
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
Comment from Brenda Strauser
I enjoyed reading your poem. Good imagination. The poem describes the three jobs very well. I like the words you used for the title. Things are sure different now. Well written.
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I enjoyed reading your poem. Good imagination. The poem describes the three jobs very well. I like the words you used for the title. Things are sure different now. Well written.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
Comment from Gunner Lil
Sentence structure needs revision. Sensory description isn't bad but could use more detail.
Why did the doctors give you only two weeks to live?
Why didn't you know you were from a poor family?
Was anyone else hurt in the traumatic accident you were in? How did it happen?
How long did you deliver the newspapers? Another year or more.
Who taught who to cheat the coke machine? Do you still cheat?
This was a good outline but not worthy of 6 stars.
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Sentence structure needs revision. Sensory description isn't bad but could use more detail.
Why did the doctors give you only two weeks to live?
Why didn't you know you were from a poor family?
Was anyone else hurt in the traumatic accident you were in? How did it happen?
How long did you deliver the newspapers? Another year or more.
Who taught who to cheat the coke machine? Do you still cheat?
This was a good outline but not worthy of 6 stars.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
Comment from marilyn quillen
great story, i was born the year before you, so everything is just as I remember too, great times made for a great story and you wrote it excellently, I don't see anything that needs improved, fantastic job. oops now that makes 4 jobs!
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great story, i was born the year before you, so everything is just as I remember too, great times made for a great story and you wrote it excellently, I don't see anything that needs improved, fantastic job. oops now that makes 4 jobs!
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
Comment from Michele Harber
I reiterate everything I said in the last review. You are a very talented writer! It truly sounds as though you had a wonderful life, but the nicest part is that you recognized it. George Bailey needed an angel to convince him of what a wonderful life he had, but all you needed was a rickety bicycle and a pocket full of money.
I love the innocence and peace of the Norman Rockwell picture you paint of your childhood. Sadly, you're correct that the things that made that time so special to you could not take place today. I'm happy for you that you have such wonderful memories to look back on, and for FanStory that we get to relive them with you through your excellent writing.
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I reiterate everything I said in the last review. You are a very talented writer! It truly sounds as though you had a wonderful life, but the nicest part is that you recognized it. George Bailey needed an angel to convince him of what a wonderful life he had, but all you needed was a rickety bicycle and a pocket full of money.
I love the innocence and peace of the Norman Rockwell picture you paint of your childhood. Sadly, you're correct that the things that made that time so special to you could not take place today. I'm happy for you that you have such wonderful memories to look back on, and for FanStory that we get to relive them with you through your excellent writing.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Your doing just fine (writing). Good work.
You're right, kids couldn't get jobs like that these days. Adults have paper routes delivering from their cars - til papers like the AR Democrat gave everyone a tablet and they now get them electronically.
Best wishes.
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Your doing just fine (writing). Good work.
You're right, kids couldn't get jobs like that these days. Adults have paper routes delivering from their cars - til papers like the AR Democrat gave everyone a tablet and they now get them electronically.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I think I might have heard part of this story before, Harry, but it's certainly a great one. You were obviously a very enterprising young lad and I think it's truly very admirable that you managed to hold down three jobs a day and cycle all over Evansville. You experienced freedom, excitement and the sheer buzz of earning cash which made you feel so rich. That was a shocking thing to learn about your cousin, especially when he was obviously a bit of a hero-figure to you. But you've conveyed here a childhood that taught you so much. After a difficult start, you were determined to make your life as full as possible and you succeeded. Well done, Harry. Debbie
At noon I rode my (bike)...
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I think I might have heard part of this story before, Harry, but it's certainly a great one. You were obviously a very enterprising young lad and I think it's truly very admirable that you managed to hold down three jobs a day and cycle all over Evansville. You experienced freedom, excitement and the sheer buzz of earning cash which made you feel so rich. That was a shocking thing to learn about your cousin, especially when he was obviously a bit of a hero-figure to you. But you've conveyed here a childhood that taught you so much. After a difficult start, you were determined to make your life as full as possible and you succeeded. Well done, Harry. Debbie
At noon I rode my (bike)...
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
Comment from Thesis
Harry, this story brought me back to my childhood. I too had a paper route and always made money somehow. My parents were poor too, so I can relate to this story. thanks for the flashback to a world that was kinder, had morals, and made us all feel a lot safer.
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Harry, this story brought me back to my childhood. I too had a paper route and always made money somehow. My parents were poor too, so I can relate to this story. thanks for the flashback to a world that was kinder, had morals, and made us all feel a lot safer.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
Comment from LJbutterfly
I'm tired and out of breath just reading about all the jobs you had during that summer. Today's kids at age ten, would want the money, but would not want to do all of that work, not when there were video games to be played. This is and enjoyable and entertaining story.
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I'm tired and out of breath just reading about all the jobs you had during that summer. Today's kids at age ten, would want the money, but would not want to do all of that work, not when there were video games to be played. This is and enjoyable and entertaining story.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
Comment from mermaids
Wow! You were quite the kid and so motivated to work. My brother had a paper route as well at a young age. I enjoyed reading your memoir. Your writing is excellent and holds the reader's interest. You definitely were unique with having three jobs at such a young age.
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Wow! You were quite the kid and so motivated to work. My brother had a paper route as well at a young age. I enjoyed reading your memoir. Your writing is excellent and holds the reader's interest. You definitely were unique with having three jobs at such a young age.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
