BOOK OF RENGA POEMS
Viewing comments for Chapter 79 "With Artistic Flair"Renga is a collective poets Japanese poem
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Comment from kahpot
Except for the cold, I love winter and the beauty this season brings, your words have captured this with beautiful imagery, very well written and presented, an excellent addition for the renga book****kahpot
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Except for the cold, I love winter and the beauty this season brings, your words have captured this with beautiful imagery, very well written and presented, an excellent addition for the renga book****kahpot
Comment Written 10-Jan-2025
Comment from Mark D. R.
June,
This is really exquisite phrasing for this Renga collaboration!
One can just sense through your poem that crystallized moment.
Mother Nature certainly knows how to paint a winter scene.
Mark
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June,
This is really exquisite phrasing for this Renga collaboration!
One can just sense through your poem that crystallized moment.
Mother Nature certainly knows how to paint a winter scene.
Mark
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
Comment from patcelaw
Although a nice storm is treacherous to men maneuver around in it can be beautiful when you see it from inside a warm, comfortable home. The trees look like crystal blowing glass. I have seen a couple of ice storms in my time and it is a beautiful thing to Behold, but it is very dangerous to be out in.
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Although a nice storm is treacherous to men maneuver around in it can be beautiful when you see it from inside a warm, comfortable home. The trees look like crystal blowing glass. I have seen a couple of ice storms in my time and it is a beautiful thing to Behold, but it is very dangerous to be out in.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
LINK
Chapter 78 7/7
a flash of red in white snow
a beam of warmth, pure delight
Chapter 79 5/7/5
With artistic flair
Winter paints the landscape by
crystallizing trees
Thank you for contributed to the Renga Book. It's an excellent chapter. The poem has a good composition and link between 5/7/5 and 7/7. Beautiful presentation and imagery. Good syllables and connection between lines. Please add the Renga Rules to your author notes. Thank you :)
***** PLEASE COPY AND PASTE THE RULES TO YOUR AUTHOR NOTES *****
HOW TO WRITE A RENGA POEM:
It's very important to LINK your Renga stanza to the previous stanza keeping the same theme and season of the year.
First copy and paste this link to your browser to check the Renga Book. Your chapter will follow the last chapter: fanstory.com/chapterdetails.jsp?id=42337
FIRST POET - starts with a three-line haiku 5/7/5 that sets the theme and season of the year.
THE SECOND POET writes a 7/7 stanza that links to the previous 5/7/5 chapter with the same theme and season of the year.
This pattern (5/7/5 stanza followed by a 7/7 stanza) continues on and on. Some renga books can be 100 stanzas or more.
To post your chapter, scroll down the renga poem page you are reading. Above the review box click on ADD CHAPTER.
Gypsy
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LINK
Chapter 78 7/7
a flash of red in white snow
a beam of warmth, pure delight
Chapter 79 5/7/5
With artistic flair
Winter paints the landscape by
crystallizing trees
Thank you for contributed to the Renga Book. It's an excellent chapter. The poem has a good composition and link between 5/7/5 and 7/7. Beautiful presentation and imagery. Good syllables and connection between lines. Please add the Renga Rules to your author notes. Thank you :)
***** PLEASE COPY AND PASTE THE RULES TO YOUR AUTHOR NOTES *****
HOW TO WRITE A RENGA POEM:
It's very important to LINK your Renga stanza to the previous stanza keeping the same theme and season of the year.
First copy and paste this link to your browser to check the Renga Book. Your chapter will follow the last chapter: fanstory.com/chapterdetails.jsp?id=42337
FIRST POET - starts with a three-line haiku 5/7/5 that sets the theme and season of the year.
THE SECOND POET writes a 7/7 stanza that links to the previous 5/7/5 chapter with the same theme and season of the year.
This pattern (5/7/5 stanza followed by a 7/7 stanza) continues on and on. Some renga books can be 100 stanzas or more.
To post your chapter, scroll down the renga poem page you are reading. Above the review box click on ADD CHAPTER.
Gypsy
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
Comment from royowen
Oh yes, not so much here, we don't get terribly cold here, a very mild climate, no snow at all, we do have the occasional frost, but not really cold, a beautifully written written post June, blessings, Roy
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Oh yes, not so much here, we don't get terribly cold here, a very mild climate, no snow at all, we do have the occasional frost, but not really cold, a beautifully written written post June, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
Comment from Elias Noor
This haiku beautifully captures the elegance of winter with concise and vivid imagery. The phrase "crystallizing trees" is especially striking, evoking a sense of artistry and wonder. It effectively conveys a serene moment, but experimenting with more sensory details might deepen the emotional impact.
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This haiku beautifully captures the elegance of winter with concise and vivid imagery. The phrase "crystallizing trees" is especially striking, evoking a sense of artistry and wonder. It effectively conveys a serene moment, but experimenting with more sensory details might deepen the emotional impact.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
