Willing Hearts
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Comment from Paul McFarland
It's nice to have a chapter without problems. It looks like you are tying things up very nicely. Looking forward to the wedding. They will make a great couple.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2025
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It's nice to have a chapter without problems. It looks like you are tying things up very nicely. Looking forward to the wedding. They will make a great couple.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2025
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from judiverse
It seems that Noah has made a new friend in toddler Greg. That was a cute scene. I don't know why Noah would need to take time off to baby sit. It's a job Sami could handle on her own. Has she plans for going back to work? Church scene handled beautifully. Take a look at his sentence: Sami kissed her mom and dad's cheeks, who moved over to make room. Well, I suppose their cheeks would have had to move over, but clarify the thought. It would simplify if you said kissed her mom and dad. Congratulations on coming to the end of this one, and it's impressive you have a new one coming up. judi
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2025
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It seems that Noah has made a new friend in toddler Greg. That was a cute scene. I don't know why Noah would need to take time off to baby sit. It's a job Sami could handle on her own. Has she plans for going back to work? Church scene handled beautifully. Take a look at his sentence: Sami kissed her mom and dad's cheeks, who moved over to make room. Well, I suppose their cheeks would have had to move over, but clarify the thought. It would simplify if you said kissed her mom and dad. Congratulations on coming to the end of this one, and it's impressive you have a new one coming up. judi
Comment Written 19-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2025
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I wondered about that sentence. I changed it at the last second and still didn't get it write. Thank you for the kind review.
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You're very welcome. I always goof when I try to revise something. Judi
Comment from eliz100
As usual, your writing is interesting. It kept me interested from the beginning. The picture fits the story. You moved the story along nicely. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2025
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As usual, your writing is interesting. It kept me interested from the beginning. The picture fits the story. You moved the story along nicely. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2025
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from lancellot
A nice family filled chapter with plenty of displays of affection, declaration of love and additions to an ever-growing family. You touched on some worries, gave some assurances and we see how life moving forward could be like. Well written.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2025
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A nice family filled chapter with plenty of displays of affection, declaration of love and additions to an ever-growing family. You touched on some worries, gave some assurances and we see how life moving forward could be like. Well written.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2025
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Only one chapter to go. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Noah is determined to become a real family man, he loves Sami that much. Once that happens, perhaps she will stop being so nervous. I'm sure there must be a wedding coming up soon. They can't carry on like this much longer, not the way their emotions are spirreling out of control. Excellent chapter, my friend. :)) Sandra
"If you're already (of) aware of this, (remove the 'of')
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2025
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Noah is determined to become a real family man, he loves Sami that much. Once that happens, perhaps she will stop being so nervous. I'm sure there must be a wedding coming up soon. They can't carry on like this much longer, not the way their emotions are spirreling out of control. Excellent chapter, my friend. :)) Sandra
"If you're already (of) aware of this, (remove the 'of')
Comment Written 19-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2025
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I will make that correction. Thank you for the catch and the kind review.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I really enjoyed reading your chapter! Your characters, especially Noah, are coming to life in such a real way. I love the way Noah's awkwardness around Sami's family feels so natural. The playful moments with Greg and the tender moments between Noah and Sami make it so heartwarming. It keeps me hooked! Keep up the great work!
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2025
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I really enjoyed reading your chapter! Your characters, especially Noah, are coming to life in such a real way. I love the way Noah's awkwardness around Sami's family feels so natural. The playful moments with Greg and the tender moments between Noah and Sami make it so heartwarming. It keeps me hooked! Keep up the great work!
Comment Written 19-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2025
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Thank you for the encouragement.
