My Book of Favored Sonnets
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Sweet Sonnet Song"My collection of various sonnets.
29 total reviews
Comment from oledihard
An honest look into love. Very well put together and brings a softness that one can hear and feel when read outloud. Wonderful entry for poem of the month.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2009
An honest look into love. Very well put together and brings a softness that one can hear and feel when read outloud. Wonderful entry for poem of the month.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2009
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Thank you, very much appreciate you taking the time to read and review.
Comment from Diny
Well I am sure the ancient bards would approve whole heartedly- with your verses too!- bravo and good luck- POM nomination congrats- write n-Di
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2009
Well I am sure the ancient bards would approve whole heartedly- with your verses too!- bravo and good luck- POM nomination congrats- write n-Di
Comment Written 24-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2009
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Thanks Di, truly appreciate your support.
Comment from Alaskastory
'Sweet Sonnet Song' is filled with lovely images and, most certainly, a true feel for sonnets.
I like the lyrical flow with the use of words like 'poetic wine', 'romantic beauty weaves', 'harps enthrall' and 'ancient bards still sing'.
Very enjoyable.
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2009
'Sweet Sonnet Song' is filled with lovely images and, most certainly, a true feel for sonnets.
I like the lyrical flow with the use of words like 'poetic wine', 'romantic beauty weaves', 'harps enthrall' and 'ancient bards still sing'.
Very enjoyable.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2009
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review.
Comment from Julie G
Truly beautiful sonnet. I found the accent not quite right in the next to last line, "O,sonnet may I drink from your wellspring." "Well-spring" is accented on the first part of the compound word-- "well" and to read it correctly in your sonnet, one must place the accent on the last part-- "spring." Am I crazy to notice this small bit? In reading again, I am wondering if there is no hard accent on either of the parts of this compounded word? Could that be? Educate me.
Julie G
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2009
Truly beautiful sonnet. I found the accent not quite right in the next to last line, "O,sonnet may I drink from your wellspring." "Well-spring" is accented on the first part of the compound word-- "well" and to read it correctly in your sonnet, one must place the accent on the last part-- "spring." Am I crazy to notice this small bit? In reading again, I am wondering if there is no hard accent on either of the parts of this compounded word? Could that be? Educate me.
Julie G
Comment Written 17-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2009
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I'm no expert on compound words but usually when I read a compound word the accent falls on the last, when I read well spring I read it as well SPRING. Both words used alone could be used as hard syllables but well is one of those words that can be soft or hard. There are many words in iambic meter that can go either direction. Don't know if that answered your question or not but hope it helped. Thanks for the read and review, much appreciated.
Comment from easyeverett
Hey, Chingoma, we both put a sonnet on it
Dawn. I just voted for you because your sonnet
is so true and I want sonnets to rule the mansion
and the lew. Good one my friend. easy
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2009
Hey, Chingoma, we both put a sonnet on it
Dawn. I just voted for you because your sonnet
is so true and I want sonnets to rule the mansion
and the lew. Good one my friend. easy
Comment Written 17-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2009
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Nothing like a sonnet!!! So love the form, but you already know that!! Yours is absolutely gorgeous though, love the use of those danglers, so smooth the ride. Thanks so much for the vote of confidence and for that lovely verse you wrote on your vote comment. You're the best!!
Comment from Graceheart
This is a WOW sonnet, so intimately touching, so sensually moving, so filled with deep desires of a tender and so longing heart! You are such the romantic soul...I love the feel your insightful, silky words place in this old and lonely heart!!! Really love this piece of your soul...Awesome darling, awesome!!!
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2009
This is a WOW sonnet, so intimately touching, so sensually moving, so filled with deep desires of a tender and so longing heart! You are such the romantic soul...I love the feel your insightful, silky words place in this old and lonely heart!!! Really love this piece of your soul...Awesome darling, awesome!!!
Comment Written 19-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2009
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Oh sweetheart, I could write of trash and you would say WOW, lol. Love you darling, thanks so much for bringing me a smile this morning.
Comment from Mastery
Wow! Dawn, this is absolutely wonderful poetry. I'm sure you must know that as we writers always know when we've somehow managed to hit the mark as it were...Bravo! wish I had a six....Bob
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2009
Wow! Dawn, this is absolutely wonderful poetry. I'm sure you must know that as we writers always know when we've somehow managed to hit the mark as it were...Bravo! wish I had a six....Bob
Comment Written 19-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2009
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Thanks, Bob, yes I'm quite proud of this one, but you knew that. Thanks for taking the time to read and review, always appreciate your words. Hugs, JL
Comment from Jarlsbane
Another beautiful sonnet from your pen... how beautiful this is indeed. I love it! I stumbled just a bit in this line-- 'their tales of love, love lost, their tales of death' not that the iambics are off but just in overall wording and smoothness... seemed a tad bit of tongue twister. Very nicely done my dear!! Hugs
-Michael
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2009
Another beautiful sonnet from your pen... how beautiful this is indeed. I love it! I stumbled just a bit in this line-- 'their tales of love, love lost, their tales of death' not that the iambics are off but just in overall wording and smoothness... seemed a tad bit of tongue twister. Very nicely done my dear!! Hugs
-Michael
Comment Written 18-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2009
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Yeah that line is designed to slow the reader down to savor the ending. LOL sure, sure, keep telling yourself that Jo Lynn. I'll see if I can smooth it out but my first bet is that I'll leave it alone. I think we were somewhat on the same wave length with the bards of old. I loved your sonnet. It's always so good to hear your voice. I miss talking with you.
Comment from words
A lovely ode to the sonnet.
Well done!
I especially liked:Beloved notes please help me to transcend
where bards from yesteryear sing in my ear
their tales of love, love lost, their tales of death;
where even in their sorrow I can hear
the music flowing from their final breath.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2009
A lovely ode to the sonnet.
Well done!
I especially liked:Beloved notes please help me to transcend
where bards from yesteryear sing in my ear
their tales of love, love lost, their tales of death;
where even in their sorrow I can hear
the music flowing from their final breath.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2009
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review. Glad you enjoyed my sonnet ode.
Comment from poetaster
Your verse has a very Old World feel which I thoroughly enjoy. So much modern poetry is schlock, and so much metered and/or rhymed poetry on Fanstory is saccharine and would make for good Hallmark cards. Continued success in your future poetic endeavors.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2009
Your verse has a very Old World feel which I thoroughly enjoy. So much modern poetry is schlock, and so much metered and/or rhymed poetry on Fanstory is saccharine and would make for good Hallmark cards. Continued success in your future poetic endeavors.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2009
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Thank you for your very kind and honest review. I do agree with what you say here.