Vision and Sound: Their Stories
Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "Heaven Observes, the Mammoth Returns"Two souls that meet as strangers on earth.
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Comment from ravenblack
I really like your passage comparing Julia's mind to the river both philosophically (very Zen) and in the craft of the writing. And good call in keeping Magic Felix's portion short. You really are upping the ante with "Valerius writing one of the most romantic poems ever" because it will be you writing it (you're up to the task).
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014
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I really like your passage comparing Julia's mind to the river both philosophically (very Zen) and in the craft of the writing. And good call in keeping Magic Felix's portion short. You really are upping the ante with "Valerius writing one of the most romantic poems ever" because it will be you writing it (you're up to the task).
Comment Written 03-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014
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I'm really pleased that you're enjoying this. It took a while to get a good feel for it. I ultimately threw the original in a drawer and just let it go where it wanted to. Lots of good advice, yours included. Thank you, mikey
Comment from Nosha17
I read and reviewed this yesterday, I don't know how it didn't get registered. Anyway, it is a very good chapter with lots of action and we learn more about the Dr's additional training to understand better the mental illness of his patient. Enjoyable as always. Faye
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I read and reviewed this yesterday, I don't know how it didn't get registered. Anyway, it is a very good chapter with lots of action and we learn more about the Dr's additional training to understand better the mental illness of his patient. Enjoyable as always. Faye
Comment Written 03-Oct-2014
Comment from robina1978
I am glad I just caught your chapter in time, thought I might have missed it as I am so far behind. I like that you casually introduce a narrator.
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I am glad I just caught your chapter in time, thought I might have missed it as I am so far behind. I like that you casually introduce a narrator.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2014
Comment from seaglass
If I'm going to reincarnate, I want to be like Felix and remember everything. I was left wondering what beast caused this accident. Everything moving along nicely.
One possible correction.
"You tire the mind and the torment slowly (lessons)." 'lessens'(e but one is sound the same, but one is taking a class and the other reducing something.
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If I'm going to reincarnate, I want to be like Felix and remember everything. I was left wondering what beast caused this accident. Everything moving along nicely.
One possible correction.
"You tire the mind and the torment slowly (lessons)." 'lessens'(e but one is sound the same, but one is taking a class and the other reducing something.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2014
Comment from faragon
Good story so far. I like the way you use the old ways of healing and healing with herbs. I also like how you have tied in the musical aspect of his past lives with this one.
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Good story so far. I like the way you use the old ways of healing and healing with herbs. I also like how you have tied in the musical aspect of his past lives with this one.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2014
Comment from Sankey
Another great tale mate. Much better for those of us who espect these kind of things from you. Good read all over. I can see a lot of your real life in this with those you care for at home perhaps and the things you and I have in common with our faith and our music. This is all a help to me to get my Fiction story going as I realize we do look back on a lot of our actual lives even when conjuring up a fictional tale. Good work mate. Another split chapter went up today with extra photo yippee another one coming shortly.
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Another great tale mate. Much better for those of us who espect these kind of things from you. Good read all over. I can see a lot of your real life in this with those you care for at home perhaps and the things you and I have in common with our faith and our music. This is all a help to me to get my Fiction story going as I realize we do look back on a lot of our actual lives even when conjuring up a fictional tale. Good work mate. Another split chapter went up today with extra photo yippee another one coming shortly.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2014
Comment from Sasha
I love it, this is not what I expected, actually better. You are a terrific story teller and I anxiously look forward to the next post. No suggestions from me, you are doing just fine without them.
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I love it, this is not what I expected, actually better. You are a terrific story teller and I anxiously look forward to the next post. No suggestions from me, you are doing just fine without them.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2014
Comment from gypsycaravan
Found nothing that needs unsucking, mikey. Your story progresses fine, in my estimation. The last line was very powerful reading to me. I think it would be great to use it in repetition throughout the story as she sees or observes what others can't.
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Found nothing that needs unsucking, mikey. Your story progresses fine, in my estimation. The last line was very powerful reading to me. I think it would be great to use it in repetition throughout the story as she sees or observes what others can't.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2014
Comment from nordicgirl
This is an amazing story with so ma.ny undercurrents that it is mind blowing. Your depiction of Julia's mind and how it functions is an incredible depiction of a schizophrenic brain. Wow! When you add the explanation that this story provides as a reason, it makes me think that there may be reasons that are along this line in reality. Not necessarily previous lives, but parts of the brain at play that we simply don't understand.
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This is an amazing story with so ma.ny undercurrents that it is mind blowing. Your depiction of Julia's mind and how it functions is an incredible depiction of a schizophrenic brain. Wow! When you add the explanation that this story provides as a reason, it makes me think that there may be reasons that are along this line in reality. Not necessarily previous lives, but parts of the brain at play that we simply don't understand.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2014
Comment from CR Delport
strong of voice and clever of verse. --- that sure is not me :) For someone who is considered touched in the head, Julia sure acts quite normal. Does the fact that she sees things that other people don't really make her crazy, or are the others just ignorant. This is another well written chapter.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2014
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strong of voice and clever of verse. --- that sure is not me :) For someone who is considered touched in the head, Julia sure acts quite normal. Does the fact that she sees things that other people don't really make her crazy, or are the others just ignorant. This is another well written chapter.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2014
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I'm so pleased that you have that take on this. That is my viewpoint as well. Working with the so-called mentally ill, I see much method to the madness over the course of time. None of the people I live with are anywhere near what they were once diagnosed to be. They just weren't given the attention it took to figure out how there minds were working and then try and make sense out of it. There always turns out to be more sense than people realize. Thank you, mikey
