Vision and Sound: Their Stories
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "Shedding Light On A Demon"Two souls that meet as strangers on earth.
16 total reviews
Comment from Darkhorse555
smiling mikey love this part a mountain climb made of bones paints quite the vision very enjoyable piece of reading beautifully penned dear friend god bless
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smiling mikey love this part a mountain climb made of bones paints quite the vision very enjoyable piece of reading beautifully penned dear friend god bless
Comment Written 08-Oct-2014
Comment from ravenblack
Rastavius- close to a perfect name for the old torturer. Conjures rat - or Bob Marley (Rasta) who was anything but a rat. It is so hard to believe/accept that at one , the majority of thinking was so primitive to see everything in terms of God and Satan and acting upon it, anything that smacked as different being the work of the devil.
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Rastavius- close to a perfect name for the old torturer. Conjures rat - or Bob Marley (Rasta) who was anything but a rat. It is so hard to believe/accept that at one , the majority of thinking was so primitive to see everything in terms of God and Satan and acting upon it, anything that smacked as different being the work of the devil.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2014
Comment from Sasha
Damn, I am glad I didn't live back then...they would have done me in for sure. Great work with this one and you clearly did your homework on it too.
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Damn, I am glad I didn't live back then...they would have done me in for sure. Great work with this one and you clearly did your homework on it too.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2014
Comment from robina1978
It is getting more and more complex in a nice way though. Excellent artwork to complement it. Well written about an original subject. I look forwards to the next chapter.
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It is getting more and more complex in a nice way though. Excellent artwork to complement it. Well written about an original subject. I look forwards to the next chapter.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2014
Comment from CR Delport
As always, this is well written and reads well. My only comment is, how did he kill her? Did he plunge a knife deep into her chest, or did he use his overgrown, sharpened fingernails to slice her throat, or did he bludgeon her with the candle? I often wonder what would God really say about all the people that killed in his name.
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As always, this is well written and reads well. My only comment is, how did he kill her? Did he plunge a knife deep into her chest, or did he use his overgrown, sharpened fingernails to slice her throat, or did he bludgeon her with the candle? I often wonder what would God really say about all the people that killed in his name.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2014
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Michael: Why did you keep the girl locked up? Work to do. Interesting. Did he judge and kill? Then he is in sin. So is this his mission for the farmer's daughter to be locked up or killed? You got some writing to do Michael. What about holy water on the girl? Ok, I will wait for your next story. You are a great writer. Congrats on the wins. flylikeaneagle
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Michael: Why did you keep the girl locked up? Work to do. Interesting. Did he judge and kill? Then he is in sin. So is this his mission for the farmer's daughter to be locked up or killed? You got some writing to do Michael. What about holy water on the girl? Ok, I will wait for your next story. You are a great writer. Congrats on the wins. flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 04-Oct-2014
Comment from ProjectBluebook
Author notes appreciated. I did not know about that two rating for violence. Takes a three. Well penned. Lots of reader awareness. You seem to have a grasp of show, instead of just telling. Something I need to work on. Be a shower. Not just a teller. You describe scenes and gives us a mental image of people, objects and actions like opening a door knob. This gives a better sense of the time era. This is a primitive era. Not sure how they spoke. Kind of slang they used. Some weapons are the arcubus, broadsword, bill & mace. I'm sure pestilence roamed like wildfire in those dark days. Must had Roman attire, if this is Italy. I like the show technique. A mental image of the surroundings is a plus. You are evolving as the chapters roll. Good technique. Count your doubloon. do loco
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014
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Author notes appreciated. I did not know about that two rating for violence. Takes a three. Well penned. Lots of reader awareness. You seem to have a grasp of show, instead of just telling. Something I need to work on. Be a shower. Not just a teller. You describe scenes and gives us a mental image of people, objects and actions like opening a door knob. This gives a better sense of the time era. This is a primitive era. Not sure how they spoke. Kind of slang they used. Some weapons are the arcubus, broadsword, bill & mace. I'm sure pestilence roamed like wildfire in those dark days. Must had Roman attire, if this is Italy. I like the show technique. A mental image of the surroundings is a plus. You are evolving as the chapters roll. Good technique. Count your doubloon. do loco
Comment Written 04-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014
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Hey buddy. Working on the show thing. Glad it's coming across. Love the info about the weapons. I"m not good at research, I need to figure out to go better. I have a basic idea in mind and I make most of it up really. This is 500 AD the beginning of the Dark Ages. Great input, always appreciated. The doubloons will fit nicely into my chest... mikey
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Ain't got them stars yet? Have you? Got some more reviews to do. Updated my poem, looks better. Spooky won that bat contest. He has pneomonia. He told me how to automatically pop up a video or a song. Now I know how to play a tune with a picture at top. I ain't tried it yet. I like the music with the picture at top. Like he did that dedication to Gungalo. Titanic scene. It's coming across. Instead of just telling it -- i need to show it. I told Harper about Maureen. I don't think Harper was a fan of Maureen. She saw her reviews. Word Girl said that fanstory made her depressed? Said she is happier now, go figure. Said she would not go back to fanstory. I don't think she won enough to keep her interest. Kind of deflated her ego. I almost listed to her -- but I went with my heart, regardless. Got reviews to do. Later Lion King
Comment from seaglass
It's revolting the crimes that have been committed and protected behind the skirts of religion. Scripture even says there are those who kill, thinking they do God a favor. However, God has given us reasoning and I have no doubt that serial killers rushed for these opportunities just as pedophiles rush for opportunities to work with kids.
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It's revolting the crimes that have been committed and protected behind the skirts of religion. Scripture even says there are those who kill, thinking they do God a favor. However, God has given us reasoning and I have no doubt that serial killers rushed for these opportunities just as pedophiles rush for opportunities to work with kids.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2014
Comment from Sankey
Ha never noticed the violence warning duh. Came right on through it.Another great chapter lots of blood and guts and gore but I seemed to endure it all. There is a new member has been a Mental nurse or practitioner he is medically retired told him to look out for you as you may have something in common as you care for your residents and all. Thanks again.
rjpurdy is the new member joined in September I think.
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Ha never noticed the violence warning duh. Came right on through it.Another great chapter lots of blood and guts and gore but I seemed to endure it all. There is a new member has been a Mental nurse or practitioner he is medically retired told him to look out for you as you may have something in common as you care for your residents and all. Thanks again.
rjpurdy is the new member joined in September I think.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2014
Comment from Nosha17
Interesting chapter, very well written. I hope Leopold realises how wrongly this woman is being treated so that he does not return to destroy the girl from his village. Good use of descriptive language and excellent historical setting. Most enjoyable Faye
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Interesting chapter, very well written. I hope Leopold realises how wrongly this woman is being treated so that he does not return to destroy the girl from his village. Good use of descriptive language and excellent historical setting. Most enjoyable Faye
Comment Written 04-Oct-2014
