Vision and Sound: Their Stories
Viewing comments for Chapter 38 "Leopold Attacks, Julia Responds."Two souls that meet as strangers on earth.
18 total reviews
Comment from Darkhorse555
well i was reading along mikey i read this and i thought oh you could use this in many ways I'll not risk life and limb against such a hideous beast excellent pen pal enjoyed the read
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well i was reading along mikey i read this and i thought oh you could use this in many ways I'll not risk life and limb against such a hideous beast excellent pen pal enjoyed the read
Comment Written 01-Nov-2014
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Michael: I like the game playing of the stew and the wild animals. Great ending with Julie staring in the wolf's eyes, got him point blank, she knows. Great story. Make him corrupt too, add more spice to Leopold. The truth will come out. Can't wait for the next story!
flylikeaneagle
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Michael: I like the game playing of the stew and the wild animals. Great ending with Julie staring in the wolf's eyes, got him point blank, she knows. Great story. Make him corrupt too, add more spice to Leopold. The truth will come out. Can't wait for the next story!
flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 31-Oct-2014
Comment from Nosha17
Cleverly written chapter, the dumb priest rendered speechless by a young girl. One might say he is possessed by the devil. Enjoyable read, I am sure the next chapter will contain more surprises. Faye
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Cleverly written chapter, the dumb priest rendered speechless by a young girl. One might say he is possessed by the devil. Enjoyable read, I am sure the next chapter will contain more surprises. Faye
Comment Written 30-Oct-2014
Comment from Sasha
I am not sure how anyone would do it, but I would be thrilled if Leopold deemed possessed by a demon. If such a a thing is possible, he would be a perfect candidate. Sadly, I think he has too much power to be caught in such a net. Great work with this chapter.
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I am not sure how anyone would do it, but I would be thrilled if Leopold deemed possessed by a demon. If such a a thing is possible, he would be a perfect candidate. Sadly, I think he has too much power to be caught in such a net. Great work with this chapter.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2014
Comment from robina1978
I am always pleased to find a next chapter. Florentina's words were heard. When confronted she got a scare and looked pale. Julia holds Leopold responsible and gives him a stare.
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I am always pleased to find a next chapter. Florentina's words were heard. When confronted she got a scare and looked pale. Julia holds Leopold responsible and gives him a stare.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2014
Comment from drivenbackward
Nice chapter!
With eyes fixed in resolve, Valerius responded. -- Reads like a speech tag. Consider a comma.
the power that he would possess? -- Consider deleting 'that'
all the while plotting the work of Satan himself. -- Yep. That's how real evil works.
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Nice chapter!
With eyes fixed in resolve, Valerius responded. -- Reads like a speech tag. Consider a comma.
the power that he would possess? -- Consider deleting 'that'
all the while plotting the work of Satan himself. -- Yep. That's how real evil works.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2014
Comment from emrpoems
Good interaction between characters
Thanks for the notes helped me to catch up on the chapters I missed.
Takes on the belief of reincarnation and from the experiences almost could make a believer out of the reader
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Good interaction between characters
Thanks for the notes helped me to catch up on the chapters I missed.
Takes on the belief of reincarnation and from the experiences almost could make a believer out of the reader
Comment Written 30-Oct-2014
Comment from faragon
I really like how you wrote this chapter and think there is nothing you can to for the betterment of this work. I like how Julia gave the Priest a what for! Good job!
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I really like how you wrote this chapter and think there is nothing you can to for the betterment of this work. I like how Julia gave the Priest a what for! Good job!
Comment Written 30-Oct-2014
Comment from gypsycaravan
Applause, applause for Julia. Guess she put the laser point on Leopold. What a demon he is. I'm hoping he gets his comeuppance soon.
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Applause, applause for Julia. Guess she put the laser point on Leopold. What a demon he is. I'm hoping he gets his comeuppance soon.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2014
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Aha! Julia turned Leo's words back on him. Yes, he is the evil priest, and he alone. He must be purified by the sword. LOL! Love it. They should kill him right there, and bury him in the forest. :)
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Aha! Julia turned Leo's words back on him. Yes, he is the evil priest, and he alone. He must be purified by the sword. LOL! Love it. They should kill him right there, and bury him in the forest. :)
Comment Written 30-Oct-2014
