Vision and Sound: Their Stories
Viewing comments for Chapter 40 "Romance Within The Storm"Two souls that meet as strangers on earth.
18 total reviews
Comment from Sasha
I am so sorry I have taken so long to get to this one. I am doing my best to catch up and hope to be done by tomorrow. I have so many that I've missed. I liked this chapter very much. I love this story too. I do hope you plan to make it into a book and try to get it published...I think it is a winner.
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I am so sorry I have taken so long to get to this one. I am doing my best to catch up and hope to be done by tomorrow. I have so many that I've missed. I liked this chapter very much. I love this story too. I do hope you plan to make it into a book and try to get it published...I think it is a winner.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2014
Comment from Lovinia
Hi Mikey
I've only managed a few chapters of tis book ... I so wish I had time for every chapter. Seems like my kind of tale. I love historical novels ... the Dark Ages, even better ... though I suspect much ado by the villains of the story. I love how well you synchronise your plot and the character development of your characters and their dialogue. I feel I know a lot just in reading this one chapter.
Happy, loving family moments and those of new lovers ... romantic and hopeful, though I guess there has to be all the ravages of narrow minded bigots to make life challenging.
This is exceptionally well written ... though I can only comment as a poet and moderately articulate writer. The writing experts will know more than moi. I do know it is the kind of novel which I would take off the shelf and enjoy. Great work. Hugs - Lovi xoxox
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Hi Mikey
I've only managed a few chapters of tis book ... I so wish I had time for every chapter. Seems like my kind of tale. I love historical novels ... the Dark Ages, even better ... though I suspect much ado by the villains of the story. I love how well you synchronise your plot and the character development of your characters and their dialogue. I feel I know a lot just in reading this one chapter.
Happy, loving family moments and those of new lovers ... romantic and hopeful, though I guess there has to be all the ravages of narrow minded bigots to make life challenging.
This is exceptionally well written ... though I can only comment as a poet and moderately articulate writer. The writing experts will know more than moi. I do know it is the kind of novel which I would take off the shelf and enjoy. Great work. Hugs - Lovi xoxox
Comment Written 07-Nov-2014
Comment from nordicgirl
Another excellent chapter. This section has taken on a life of its own. It has grown naturally into quite the epic story. The events and characters have all grown and developed naturally. Very compeliing and real.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Another excellent chapter. This section has taken on a life of its own. It has grown naturally into quite the epic story. The events and characters have all grown and developed naturally. Very compeliing and real.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much. You're input has been appreciated and helpful. I do listen and take the ideas to heart. mikey
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the story. The young adults are finding love. The doctor is admitting to feelings that tell him of pass lives. Love will give them strength. Julia and Cassius are finding out they are kindred spirits too. They have friends who will help them learn the actions of the enemy. Great work.
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I love the story. The young adults are finding love. The doctor is admitting to feelings that tell him of pass lives. Love will give them strength. Julia and Cassius are finding out they are kindred spirits too. They have friends who will help them learn the actions of the enemy. Great work.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2014
Comment from Darkhorse555
really most enjoyable very beautifully crafted story mikey most excellent read dear friend really love watching were its going pal
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really most enjoyable very beautifully crafted story mikey most excellent read dear friend really love watching were its going pal
Comment Written 05-Nov-2014
Comment from Joe_P
The story continues to hold my interest. I am anxious to find out where the tale is headed. The dark ages was a brutal time.
Note:
"A man as special as Julia..." I think you meant Valarius.
Joe
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2014
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The story continues to hold my interest. I am anxious to find out where the tale is headed. The dark ages was a brutal time.
Note:
"A man as special as Julia..." I think you meant Valarius.
Joe
Comment Written 04-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2014
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Good catch, Joe. Not one person (including me!) caught that. This was going to be a much shorter section of the book, but it became rather interested in it myself. Glad you're enjoying. mikey
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Other members have told me that I catch errors other reviewers don't. I wish I could catch those errors in my own writing. LOL. I haven't been on Fan Story long, but from some of the comments I've read, I get the feeling some reviewers are in a big hurry, so I think they don't read carefully.
Joe
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True. Many or most are in a big hurry. There are some great reviewers here. It just takes time to run across them. Most of the people here have something worthwhile to offer from time to time though. I never would have caught that error. I'm too busy looking for, "that", "was", "very", "really", etc! My computer screen is yellow with post it notes!
Comment from ProjectBluebook
This chapter looks uniform and neat. A nice looking presentation and a lot of deep thought went into this chapter. Almost spag perfect if there is such a thing. Kept me entertained. Author notes are a big help. So they are like a family. Together. Count your doubloon. wackydo
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This chapter looks uniform and neat. A nice looking presentation and a lot of deep thought went into this chapter. Almost spag perfect if there is such a thing. Kept me entertained. Author notes are a big help. So they are like a family. Together. Count your doubloon. wackydo
Comment Written 04-Nov-2014
Comment from seaglass
it's moving into the romance that will bond them all into a family. The will be stronger against the evil when united. you moved the romance skillfully. I've read that in these times, life was so unpredictable and people were so interdependent, relationships developed quickly as though with a sense of urgency.
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it's moving into the romance that will bond them all into a family. The will be stronger against the evil when united. you moved the romance skillfully. I've read that in these times, life was so unpredictable and people were so interdependent, relationships developed quickly as though with a sense of urgency.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2014
Comment from emrpoems
What could possibly be going on [in] that sweet little head?
did you miss this word out?[in]
love the little tete-a-tete you have with you wife. I do this with my mother too
Cassius looked down the road and saw Trellitia [as she]walked hurriedly towards the house
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Cassius looked down the road and saw Trellitia walked[walking] hurriedly towards the house
Thanks for the notes it made the story even more intriguing
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What could possibly be going on [in] that sweet little head?
did you miss this word out?[in]
love the little tete-a-tete you have with you wife. I do this with my mother too
Cassius looked down the road and saw Trellitia [as she]walked hurriedly towards the house
OR
Cassius looked down the road and saw Trellitia walked[walking] hurriedly towards the house
Thanks for the notes it made the story even more intriguing
Comment Written 03-Nov-2014
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Michael: So well written with suspense and love and romance and then... oh, no, next week. Well, no commercials. Make the evil priest evil with taking funds from the church and getting caught. That will make other see demons in his ways. Do the priest pray or just make house calls? Dark Ages, only the priests had the Bible and knew Latin. Maybe, the priests reads out of the Bible. I like your stories and Trellitia watching in the woods. Great writing!
flylikeaneagle
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Michael: So well written with suspense and love and romance and then... oh, no, next week. Well, no commercials. Make the evil priest evil with taking funds from the church and getting caught. That will make other see demons in his ways. Do the priest pray or just make house calls? Dark Ages, only the priests had the Bible and knew Latin. Maybe, the priests reads out of the Bible. I like your stories and Trellitia watching in the woods. Great writing!
flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 03-Nov-2014
